Claire\'s Homework
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Thank you for this Claire. Very well said.
In my opinion, the existence of aliens is feasible because of the foundation of water(moisture) on Mars.
>>> OR: In my opinion, the existence of aliens is feasible because of the existence of water(moisture) on Mars.
And the size of the universe and the possibility of the existence of aliens.
>>> OR: And the size of the universe gives the possibility of the existence of aliens.
Also, photos of aliens and spaceships.
>>> OR: Also, there are photos of aliens and spaceships.
Firstly, the foundation of moisture on Mars.
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>>> OR: Firstly, the existence of moisture in Mars.
Recently, robots sent to Mars for research have discovered some solid form of moisture on Mars, which means there might be some possibilities for living creatures to exist somewhere on Mars.
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Still, even if this is just a theory, there are three most essential things for living things to live.
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They are oxygen, water, and food.
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But, as robots discovered moisture, it had proven that Mars has at least one need for living things to live.
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Accordingly, it supports the possibility of unknown creatures in the universe.
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Secondly, the size of the universe is in proportion to the possibility of aliens.
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With current technology, humans can\'t measure the size of the universe.
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According to the Big Bang theory, space keeps getting bigger.
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Thus, we can\'t exclude the possibility of aliens existing in such huge space as humans can\'t measure.
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The universe is large and has no end.
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Then, it\'s evident that there is a possibility of aliens in proportion to the size of the universe.
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Third, witnesses.
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Some people assert that aliens have kidnaped them.
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An old married couple from States said they were abducted by aliens and tested by aliens in the spaceship.
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People might think they are lying, but hypnosis has made the testimony.
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Of course, we can\'t exclude the possibility of lying, but it can still be the frame in inferring the existence of aliens.
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Aside from testimonies, there are also some photos of aliens or spaceships taken from people.
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They might be manipulated, but for instance, photos taken from many people might need consideration of the fact check.
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There might be aliens somewhere in the universe as people discovered water on Mars, the relation with the size of the universe and the possibility of alien existence, and spaceships caught on the people\'s camera lenses.
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For now, finding the trace of a new life in the universe might be the role of scientists, but perhaps in the far future, it might be the natural thing to see aliens on Earth.
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