Claire\'s Homework
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Thank you so much for this Claire. Very well said.
Scrapbooks are recording notes for our memories and are being used to remind happy memories with family or friends in the past.
>>> OR: Scrapbooks are for recording notes of our memories and are being used to remind us of happy memories with family or friends in the past.
Scrapbooks can be a gift for having closer relationships with precious people around us.
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In a hypothetical, if I own a scrapbook, I would like to put many happy and treasured memories I have into it.
>>> Hypothetically speaking, if I own a scrapbook, I would like to put many happy and treasured memories I have into it.
The memories of happy experiences, the important memories in my life, and the memories I want to share.
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In the first place, I would keep my memories of happy experiences.
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The first thing to remember about the purpose of making a scrapbook is to remind us of happy memories of the past.
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For a scrapbook to be a time machine that takes us to the sunny days, it should contain many happy reminiscences.
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I have some beautiful memories of my past.
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When I was still a pupil, I was so excited to meet new friends and learn new things on the first day of entering elementary school for the first time.
>>> When I was still a pupil, I was so excited to meet new friends and learn new things on the first day of entering elementary school.
>>> OR: When I was still a pupil, I was so excited to meet new friends and learn new things when entering elementary school for the first time.
Before entering my first school, I kept opening my backpack, checking if I packed everything I needed.
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And when I entered the classroom, I sat on a wooden chair and finally opened my new textbooks.
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I could pick up on the tension in the room by everyone’s nervous faces looking at each other awkwardly, a bit quivering.
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This memory is one of the memories that gave me a strong impression and a memory that I can never whip away.
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On that day, my parents took a picture of me, and that photo is still attached to my family photo album.
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A happy memory like this is worth remembering, and that’s what scrapbooks should do.
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>>> OR: A happy memory like this is worth remembering, and that’s what scrapbooks are for.
In the way happy memories are put into the scrapbook, the important memories in my life are equally important as happy memories.
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What crucial memory means is the precious memories to you.
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They might be the beautiful memories that make you smile or the sad memories that might make you burst into tears.
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For me, for example, the virtual memories are from the present.
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This year is such an important year for my studies, and for my future.
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This year will be remembered as a meaningful memory.
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In my opinion, the scrapbook should also include essential memories, not only happy memories, as it contains various happenings in one’s life.
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Moreover, the scrapbooks contain the experiences we want to share.
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If I compare the scrapbook to something, scrapbooks are a portable part of life records.
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As scrapbooks are suitable for carrying and handing to someone else, the scrapbook can share life stories, for example, to descendants and grandchildren.
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The scrapbook contains the part of our life in it.
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Scrapbooks are the records of the life and show us the happy, meaningful memories that need to be shared.
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Scrapbooks contain happy and precious moments in our lives.
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Scrapbooks can remind us of happy memories of the past.
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