Claire\'s Homework

2022-10-15 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

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What do you think is the worst invention of mankind? I think the worst invention is the gun. Guns are often abused for crimes, terrorism, etc. I can hear a lot of news about accidents that are related to guns. Governments stipulate the use of guns, but bad things happen regardless of the rules or hopes. Also, guns are used as the most common weapons in war. In my opinion, guns perhaps made the situation worse. If guns weren\'t invented, fewer people could have lost their lives. Not only humans, guns are killing animals too. Guns are used for hunting animals. I hope no more people gets hurt of lose their lives because of guns.

강사 첨삭

Hello Claire!
I\'m so impressed! This was very close to perfection! You wrote this so well. I\'m proud of your improvements. See you next week! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

I think the worst invention is the gun.
>>CORRECT!
Guns are often abused for crimes, terrorism, etc. 
>>CORRECT!
I can hear a lot of news about accidents that are related to guns.
>>CORRECT!
Governments stipulate the use of guns, but bad things happen regardless of the rules or hopes.
>>Governments regulate the use of guns, but bad things happen regardless of the rules or limitations. 
Also, guns are used as the most common weapons in war.
>>CORRECT!
In my opinion, guns perhaps made the situation worse. 
>>CORRECT!
If guns weren\'t invented, fewer people could have lost their lives.
>>CORRECT!
Not only humans, guns are killing animals too.
>>CORRECT!
Guns are used for hunting animals.
>>CORRECT!
I hope no more people gets hurt of lose their lives because of guns.
>>CORRECT!

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