clash of clan2

2016-01-21 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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Today I finally upgrade the townhall to level7 so I was very happy today. Now I can upgrade the other new defences and unlock other new things. I was really wanting to upgrade the town hall very much for about a moths. It was my best day ever. I want to keep upgrade my townhall and get my level higher. However, be great and being leveled high you won't have fun of paying games. so I will just play not too bad but not too good. My sister needs a very much help because she is just a beginnier.

강사 첨삭

Hi Min!^^ Happy Thursday!   As they say, hard work pays off.:) But then don\'t get to addicted in playing games, okay? Don\'t let it affect you studies--never let it affect your performance in school. But of course, it\'s still your vacation. If you sister needs assistance then lend her a hand. Thank you so much for this composition.   ~T. Mayleen~   Today I finally upgrade the townhall to level7 so I was very happy today. >> Today, I was very happy  because I finally got to upgrade the townhall to level7. Now I can upgrade the other new defences and unlock other new things. >> Now I can upgrade other defences and unlock new things. I was really wanting to upgrade the town hall very much for about a moths. >> I\'ve been meaning to upgrade the townhall for about a month already. It was my best day ever. >> CORRECT I want to keep upgrade my townhall and get my level higher. >> I want to keep upgrading my townhall and get to higher levels. However, be great and being leveled high you won\'t have fun of paying games. >> However, being too good won\'t be fun in playing games. so I will just play not too bad but not too good. >> So I will just play in an average manner. My sister needs a very much help because she is just a beginnier. >> My sisters needs more help since she\'s still a beginner.

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