clash of clan2
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Today I finally upgrade the townhall to level7 so I was very happy today. Now I can upgrade the other new defences and unlock other new things. I was really wanting to upgrade the town hall very much for about a moths. It was my best day ever. I want to keep upgrade my townhall and get my level higher. However, be great and being leveled high you won't have fun of paying games. so I will just play not too bad but not too good. My sister needs a very much help because she is just a beginnier.
강사 첨삭
Hi Min!^^
Happy Thursday!
As they say, hard work pays off.:)
But then don\'t get to addicted in playing games, okay? Don\'t let it affect you studies--never let it affect your performance in school. But of course, it\'s still your vacation.
If you sister needs assistance then lend her a hand.
Thank you so much for this composition.
~T. Mayleen~
Today I finally upgrade the townhall to level7 so I was very happy today.
>> Today, I was very happy because I finally got to upgrade the townhall to level7.
Now I can upgrade the other new defences and unlock other new things.
>> Now I can upgrade other defences and unlock new things.
I was really wanting to upgrade the town hall very much for about a moths.
>> I\'ve been meaning to upgrade the townhall for about a month already.
It was my best day ever.
>> CORRECT
I want to keep upgrade my townhall and get my level higher.
>> I want to keep upgrading my townhall and get to higher levels.
However, be great and being leveled high you won\'t have fun of paying games.
>> However, being too good won\'t be fun in playing games.
so I will just play not too bad but not too good.
>> So I will just play in an average manner.
My sister needs a very much help because she is just a beginnier.
>> My sisters needs more help since she\'s still a beginner.
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