Clash of Clans
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Hi [이름]! ^^
I hope you have a good start for the week!
What can I say! You seem to be having fun with playing \"Clash of Clans.\" Good for you! I am not very familiar with this game but it looks like you have reached a high level. Am I right? Well, I hope you really enjoy playing this game. Sometimes we need something to relieve us of the stress brought by studies or work, right?
Thank you for sharing some information about this game. Don\'t be so desperate about reaching higher levels; I\'m sure you\'ll get there.
:-)
~T. Mayleen ^^
Clash of Clans
>> CORRECT
Clash of clan is a game that you build your village and attack the others village.
>> \"Clash of Clans\" is a game wherein you build your village and attack the others villages.
With attacking you can earn gold and elxer.
>> With these attacks, you can earn gold and elixir.
Using gold you can upgrade town hall, clan castle elixer storage and the elixer collecter.
>> Using these golds, you can upgrade the town hall, the clan castle elixir storage and the elixir collectors.
You can also upgrade your wallsand other defences.
>> You can also upgrade your walls and and other defenses.
I am now town hall6 with clan castle level 3.
>> I am now in Town Hall 6 with Clan Castle Level 3.
Walls level6, wizard towerlevel2, archer tower level7, elixer collecter level10, gold mine level10, gold storagr level 10 same with elixer storage.
>> I have also reached these levels: walls are in level 6; wizard is in tower level 7; elixir collector is in level 10; gold mine is also in level 10; and both gold storage and elixir storage are also in level 10.
I have been really desparate to ugrade my tow hall to level 7 but I decided to updrde clan castle
>> I have really been desperate to upgrade my Town Hall to level 7 but I decided to upgrade the Clan Castle instead.
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