Climate Change likely be in 50 years later

2020-01-17 · 첨삭 강사 James

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Thesis about climate change and the effect of it claims that temperature will approximately increase 4 degrees if the current situation (wasting gasoline,fuel e.t.c) reamains for century. The history of past century that emphasizes the importance of 1 degree increase in world climate shown we should be conscious of it. But the climate indicator points the worse apsect. Since I believe things which are proved, I believe what scientists say. WE should be conscious about current situation.

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Thesis about climate change and the effect of it claims that temperature will approximately increase 4 degrees if the current situation (wasting gasoline,fuel e.t.c) reamains for century. 
>>> Thesis about climate change and the effect of it claims that temperature will approximately increase 4 degrees if the current situation (wasting gasoline, fuel e.t.c) remains for a century. 
The history of past century that emphasizes the importance of 1 degree increase in world climate shown we should be conscious of it.
>>> The history of the past century that emphasizes the importance of a 1-degree increase in world climate shown we should be conscious of it. 
But the climate indicator points the worse apsect. 
>>> But the climate indicator points to the worse aspect. 
Since I believe things which are proved, I believe what scientists say. 
>>> CORRECT
WE should be conscious about current situation.
>>> We should be conscious of the current situation.

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