Coffee shop, Bank
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1. coffee shop
Wow! I think l am a little nervous. You know. Because this is my first time talking about the coffee shop. There are so many coffee shops in Korea. But it\\\'s been a while since I haven\\\'t been to a street cafe. I was busy with work and parenting. My main coffee shop is Ediya on the first floor of the my company\\\'s building. The Ediya has a simple ordering desk and a place where 5 baristas make coffee.
I usually buy take-out coffee after lunch. There are many people waiting to order coffee, so there is usually a waiting time of about 10 minutes. I buy a cup of coffee and walk the company\\\'s walking course with my colleagues for about 30 minutes. Overall, During lunch time, it feels like the company has become a big coffee shop.
2. Bank
As soon as you enter the bank, you will see a machine that picks up a number ticket. There is also a desk where you can face and talk with tellers. Tellers are very kind and helpful. They provide high quality service about finance.
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Wow! I think l am a little nervous.
>> CORRECT
You know. Because this is my first time talking about the coffee shop.
>> It\'s my first time talking about coffee shops.
There are so many coffee shops in Korea.
>> There are many of them in Korea.
But it\\\'s been a while since I haven\\\'t been to a street cafe.
>>Regardless, it\'s been a while since I\'ve been to a street café.
I was busy with work and parenting.
>> CORRECT
My main coffee shop is Ediya on the first floor of the my company\\\'s building.
>> The coffee shop that I go to the most is Ediya. It\'s on the first floor of my company\'s building.
The Ediya has a simple ordering desk and a place where 5 baristas make coffee.
>>The Ediya has a simple ordering desk which has 5 baristas.
I usually buy take-out coffee after lunch.
>>CORRECT
There are many people waiting to order coffee, so there is usually a waiting time of about 10 minutes.
>>CORRECT
I buy a cup of coffee and walk the company\\\'s walking course with my colleagues for about 30 minutes.
>> I buy a cup of coffee and walk on the company\'s walking course with my colleagues for about 30 minutes.
Overall, During lunch time, it feels like the company has become a big coffee shop.
>> Overall, during lunch time, it feels like the company has become a big coffee shop.
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Bank
As soon as you enter the bank, you will see a machine that picks up a number ticket.
>> CORRECT
There is also a desk where you can face and talk with tellers.
>>CORRECT
Tellers are very kind and helpful.
>>CORRECT
They provide high quality service about finance.
>>CORRECT
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