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When I drink , I will never drive.
Drink and drive is very dangerous for you and other people.
It threatens other's life as well as yours.
And if you get caught in a crackdown on drink driving.
You should pay for a heavy fine which is 100 times more expensive than a susbstitute driver charge.
But if I brought my car to a bar , I might drink and drive.
So not to bring your car to drinking place is very important.
I have once drunk and drove few years ago.,
With my friends, I drunk a couple of bottles of beer.
and I thought I could drive.
So I and my friends went to the downtown for clubbing by my car.
And I had a close call on the drive to the club.
I almost hit guardrail.
강사 첨삭
Wow, that was quiet a hit my dear [이름], but good to hear that you never drink and drive anymore.^^
Its really an important thing not to bring your car whenever you go to a club..:)
Anyway, job well done to your composition.
Talk to you again later my dear..
Teacher Cam
When I drink , I will never drive.
>>When I drink, I never drive.
Drink and drive is very dangerous for you and other people.
>>Drinking while driving is very dangerous for you and other people.
It threatens other's life as well as yours.
>>correct!
And if you get caught in a crackdown on drink driving.
>>And if you get caught in a crackdown on drunk driving.
You should pay for a heavy fine which is 100 times more expensive than a susbstitute driver charge.
>>correct!
But if I brought my car to a bar , I might drink and drive.
>>correct!
So not to bring your car to drinking place is very important.
>>correct!
>>So not bringing a car to a drinking place is very important.
I have once drunk and drove few years ago.,
>>Ive experienced drinking while driving few years ago.
With my friends, I drunk a couple of bottles of beer.
>>correct!
and I thought I could drive.
>>correct!
So I and my friends went to the downtown for clubbing by my car.
>>So I and my friends went downtown to club my car.
And I had a close call on the drive to the club.
>>correct!
I almost hit guardrail.
>>correct!
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