Common feature in [이름]chi and life
학생이 쓴 원문
Cabbage should be died five times to become a good and delicious [이름]chi. First, it die when extracted from the soil. Second, it died again when divided into multiple pieces. Third, it died again when salted. Fourth, it died again when mixed in the hot pepper and salted sea foods, and finally it died when buried in the soil within the pot. After that the [이름]ch can be tasted well.I think life is similar to [이름]chi.To live with a matured and happy life like [이름]chi, we need to suppress hot temper, avarice, and remove bias to others and fixed wrong spirit. I think we can have happy life as conceding to each other and so we get win-win life. Like [이름]chi is getting matured slowly to make us happy and healthy with good taste, I hope our life can also be happy with consderation each other and mutual understanding.
강사 첨삭
Dear [Name]. [이름],
A blissful Monday to you! ^.^
Thank you for sharing your thoughts about [이름]chi and life! ^^
I totally agree with you.
I was so enlightened from what you have written.
I just ate [이름]chi during my lunch, and because of your composition, I come to realize the connection between the dish that you said and life.
I am so dedicated now to have a better life.
You somehow taught me that we are like cabbages.
We need to face a lot of challenges for us to become better individuals.
Anyway, thank you very much for a very wonderful sharing! ^^,
See you later! ^^.
... Teacher Paula ... ^.~
P.S.: Don\'t forget to see the corrections and suggestions below. Happy reading! ^^.
Cabbage should be died five times to become a good and delicious [이름]chi.
>> Cabbage should die five times to become a good and delicious [이름]chi.
First, it die when extracted from the soil.
>> First, it dies when extracted from the soil.
>> OR: First, it dies when harvested.
Second, it died again when divided into multiple pieces.
>> Second, it dies again when divided into multiple pieces.
Third, it died again when salted.
>> Third, it dies again when salted.
Fourth, it died again when mixed in the hot pepper and salted sea foods, and finally it died when buried in the soil within the pot.
>> Fourth, it dies again when mixed with hot pepper and salted sea foods, and finally it dies again when buried in the soil within a pot.
After that the [이름]ch can be tasted well.I think life is similar to [이름]chi.
>> After that [이름]chi can be tasted will.
I think life is similar to [이름]chi.
>> CORRECT!
To live with a matured and happy life like [이름]chi, we need to suppress hot temper, avarice, and remove bias to others and fixed wrong spirit.
>> To live with a mature and happy life like [이름]chi, we need to supress hot temper, avarice, remove bias to others and fix wrong spirit.
I think we can have happy life as conceding to each other and so we get win-win life.
>> I think we can have a happy life as conceding to each other and so we get a win-win life.
Like [이름]chi is getting matured slowly to make us happy and healthy with good taste, I hope our life can also be happy with consderation each other and mutual understanding.
>> Like [이름]chi that gets matured slowly to make us happy and healthy with good taste, I hope our life can also be happy with consideration for each other and mutual understanding.
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