Compare how birthdays are celebrated in your home culture a Western \"party\"style. What does this r
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My country birthday party is before eating no cake,eating chocolate pie snack.
But now my country,many country birthday party is eating some cakes
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Hi Jimmy!
This is your second revised composition from last week\'s homework. I appreciate your sending it despite your busy schedule. You can see the corrected version below.
Cheers,
Jean~~
Compare how birthdays are celebrated in your home culture with a Western party style.
My country birthday party is before eating no cake,eating chocolate pie snack.
>>> In the past, birthday parties in my country did not have cake; we ate chocolate pie or snacks instead.
But now my country,many country birthday party is eating some cakes
>>> But now, in my country and in many others, birthday parties include cake.
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