compare the Iphone5 with the Galaxy3
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I think the main purpose of using smart phone would be different as people's needs are different.
Some people want design thinking stuffs, the other people want multi functional stuffs.
I think Iphone 5 would be good for design thinking users and Galaxy 3 would be good for function-oriented users.
In my case, I don't like Iphone5 or Galaxy3. Because I like simple and user-friendly phone.
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A wonderful morning to you, [이름]! :)
You\'re a very simple man. That\'s really admirable. I think people are just making a big fuss out of this matter whether be it an iphone 5 or a galaxy phone, it\'s okay as long as people are comfortable with it. Anyway, I have made the necessary corrections below. Thank you so much and have a great day!
I think the main purpose of using smart phone would be different as people\'s needs are different.
>>I think the main purpose of using a smart phone is different as people\'s needs are different. Some people want design thinking stuffs, the other people want multi functional stuffs.
>>Some people want design-thinking stuff while the others want multi-functional stuff.I think Iphone 5 would be good for design thinking users and Galaxy 3 would be good for function-oriented users.
>>CORRECT!In my case, I don\'t like Iphone5 or Galaxy3. Because I like simple and user-friendly phone.
>>In my case, I don\'t like iphone 5 or galaxy s3 because I like simple and user-friendly phones.
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