Compare the neighborhood in the province and the city.
학생이 쓴 원문
Well, I guess to compare two things. First, there are many things whatever I can do near my place. Also, the most important thing is to get a delivery food like chicken, pizza and fast food. On the other hand, living a province I think you can feel quiet and peaceful. So when I retired, I might live there before being die. :)
강사 첨삭
Great job with this one Elic! Never forget to express a complete thought in each sentence before you proceed and make a new one. But overall you did pretty good with this homework. Thank you! :)
>> I will compare two things.
First, there are many things whatever I can do near my place.
>> First, there are many things that I can do near my place.
Also, the most important thing is to get a delivery food like chicken, pizza and fast food.
>> Also, the most important thing is that I get to order food like chicken, pizza, and fast food.
On the other hand, living a province I think you can feel quiet and peaceful.
>> On the other hand, living in the province you can feel quiet and peaceful.
So when I retired, I might live there before being die.
>> When I retire, I might live there before I die.
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