Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the othe
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I think the importance of the completion of university education in terms of landing a decent job depends on which occupations one wants to achieve for their living. In fact, if the work requires a highly critical thinking, excellent planning and management skills, for example, professional fields such as finance, accounting, law, science etc. then those who want them should go to university to acquire a necessary academic knowledge and professional skills during and off the campus in order to be considered as a good asset for any relevant positions they want to apply for. On the other hand, if the work appreciate more practical knowledge and hands-on experience, then one should certainly not go to university because it would be waste of time and efforts but to practical school that offers a probation period in the relevant job market. This includes machinery, cooking, any service related fields. Policymakers should acknowledge What accounts for a good job differs from person to person.
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In fact, if the work requires a highly critical thinking, excellent planning and management skills, for example, professional fields such as finance, accounting, law, science etc. then those who want them should go to university to acquire a necessary academic knowledge and professional skills during and off the campus in order to be considered as a good asset for any relevant positions they want to apply for.
>>In fact, if the work requires highly critical thinking, excellent planning and management skills for professional fields such as finance, accounting, law, Science, etc, then they have to go to the university to acquire necessary academic knowledge and professional skills that they can utilize in any relevant positions they are applying for.
On the other hand, if the work appreciate more practical knowledge and hands-on experience, then one should certainly not go to university because it would be waste of time and efforts but to practical school that offers a probation period in the relevant job market.
>>On the other hand, if the work requires practical knowledge and hands-on experience, then they don\'t need to go to the university because it would be a waste of time and effort.
This includes machinery, cooking, any service related fields.
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Policymakers should acknowledge what accounts for a good job differs from person to person.
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