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I'd like to ask changing the route of Shuttle Bus. I commute by my car. The fuel and tolgate fee are ruinous for me. I know that the course of Shuttle Bus (1) is Hadan to Seomyun to BKO. The shuttle bus is pass my home ( Daeyeon beach apartment) My home is not Daeyeon beach apt. but very cloesed it. I kindly asked Mr. [Name] that changing the route of shuttle bus in Daeyeon beach apartment after Seomyun route.Because there are many employee lived in around in Daeyeon beach apartment. If the route of shuttle bus is added, many employee save the money, time and effect. Mr. [Name] said that he understand what I mean but he need to concern about schedule a driving and opinion of an other employee. And he need a Mr. [Name] and management team's approval. ( I think it doesn't matter the schedule a driving because Daeyeon beach apartment is passing route Seomyun to BKO. And it doesn't matter the opinion of an other employee.

Hello my dear Bella, Thank you so much for making your composition my dear. Here are the modifications I made for you.. Talk to you again tomorrow and have a good day.. xoxoTeacher Cam^^ I\'d like to ask changing the route of Shuttle Bus. >>I\'d like to ask the new route of the shuttle bus.I commute by my car. The fuel and tolgate fee are ruinous for me.>>correct I know that the course of Shuttle Bus (1) is Hadan to Seomyun to BKO. >>correctThe shuttle bus is pass my home ( Daeyeon beach apartment)>>The shuttle bus will pass by my home (Daeyon beach apartment)My home is not Daeyeon beach apt. but very cloesed it. >>My house is not located in Daeyon beach apartment but it is very close to it.I kindly asked Mr. [Name] that changing the route of shuttle bus in Daeyeon beach apartment after Seomyun route. >>I asked Mr. [Name] kindly to change the route of shuttle bus in Daeyeon beach apartment after Seomyun route. Because there are many employee lived in around in Daeyeon beach apartment. >>Because there are many employees livedIf the route of shuttle bus is added, many employee save the money, time and effect. >>If the route will be changed, many employees will save the money, time and effort.Mr. [Name] said that he understand what I mean but he need to concern about schedule a driving and opinion of an other employee. >>Mr. [Name] said he understood whan I meant but he needs to pay much concern on the schedule of driving and the opinions of other employees.And he need a Mr. [Name] and management team\'s approval. >>And he needs Mr. [Name] and management\'s approval. ( I think it doesn\'t matter the schedule a driving because Daeyeon beach apartment is passing route Seomyun to BKO. >>I think the schedule of driving has nothing to do with it because Daeyeon beach apartment is passing route Seomyun to BKO. And it doesn\'t matter the opinion of an other employee. >>Other employee\'s opinion also doesn\'t matter.