Composition
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.
I think mass media should not pay much attention to the personal lives of famous people. They are people in democratic society, so they also have a right to persue their private lives. Actually, there are some problems like suicides or legal disputes because mass media try to make a fortune by selling the news. Of course, public figures and celebrities must try to be a good model for people.
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.I think mass media should not pay much attention to the personal lives of famous people.
>>Correct!
They are people in democratic society, so they also have a right to persue their private lives.
>>They are the people in the democratice society, so they also have the right to pursue their private lives.
Actually, there are some problems like suicides or legal disputes because mass media try to make a fortune by selling the news.
>> Actually, there are some problems like suicides or legal disputes because the mass media try to make a fortune by selling the news.
Of course, public figures and celebrities must try to be a good model for people.
>>Correct!
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