Composition
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns. Use specific reasons and example to support your answer.
I saw a list which jobs are popular in Korea in a newspaper the other day. I was able to guess even I didn't see the result. It is natural that well paid jobs hold top rank. I know the importance of money in our times and many people think the more they have, the happier they will be. However, when it comes to choosing a job, we have to be careful. I would rather choose my job enjoying my work than earning more money. Because I figure I get happiness from what I'm doing now, not how much I'm earning.
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns. Use specific reasons and example to support your answer.I saw a list which jobs are popular in Korea in a newspaper the other day.
>>I saw a list of popular jobs in Korea in a newspaper the other day.
I was able to guess even I didn\'t see the result.
>>I was able to guess even if I didn\'t see the result.
It is natural that well paid jobs hold top rank.
>>It is natural that the well paid jobs are the top ranks.
I know the importance of money in our times and many people think the more they have, the happier they will be.
>>Correct!
However, when it comes to choosing a job, we have to be careful.
>>Correct!
I would rather choose my job enjoying my work than earning more money.
>>I would rather choose a job I enjoy rather than earning more money on a job I don\'t enjoy.
Because I figure I get happiness from what I\'m doing now, not how much I\'m earning.
>>Because I figured that I can get happiness from what I do now from how much I\'m earning.
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