Composition

2012-12-26 · 첨삭 강사 Aurora

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Do you think that people all over the world should celebrate Christmas? Give details to your answer. Christmas is one of big holidays these days. To Catholic, they celebrate Jusus' birth and help poor people. But some people think they have another weekend and stay home all day. Some people think the day as their birthdays, so they usually go out for dinner and take a trip. Many restaurants and gift shops overcharge the price and sometimes there are some trouble. I think we should regard Christmas as a religious day as it had meant. I hope other religions like Muslim, Buddhism and Judaism also celebrate that day together.

강사 첨삭

I suppose that what most people forget to realize was that Christmas is not about being materialistic, or receiving gifts or money from relatives. Christmas is an important day to celebrate Jesus\' birth and the peace than came about from it. Many celebrate it for the wrong reasons that\'s why I think they make troubles. Anyway, have a peaceful and colorful day ahead [이름]! ^^ T. Aurora Do you think that people all over the world should celebrate Christmas? Give details to your answer.Christmas is one of big holidays these days. >>Christmas is one of the biggest holidays these days.  To Catholic, they celebrate Jusus\' birth and help poor people. >> To Catholics, they celebrate Jesus\' birth and help poor people. But some people think they have another weekend and stay home all day. >>But some people think they it\'s just another weekend and stay at home all day.  Some people think the day as their birthdays, so they usually go out for dinner and take a trip. >> Some people think that day as their birthdays, so they usually go out for dinner and take a trip.  Many restaurants and gift shops overcharge the price and sometimes there are some trouble. >>Many restaurants and gift shops overcharge on the prices of some items and sometimes there are some troubles. I think we should regard Christmas as a religious day as it had meant. >>I think we should regard Christmas as a religious day as it was meant. I hope other religions like Muslim, Buddhism and Judaism also celebrate that day together. >>Correct!

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