Composition
학생이 쓴 원문
Happy New Year, Aurora!
I wish you all the best in 2013.
I was really happy to meet you last year and I promise I'll do my best this year as I have been doing.^^
Would you ever adopt a child? Why or why not?
Adopting a child is good for making our society happy and comfortable. However, there needs some help or support from the national policy and communities. That's because if I were to adopt a child, I would have responsibility for his or her behaviors and I might need some money to raise him or her. Moreover, there are still critical thoughts in this society now. So I don't like to adopt a child so far. However, when it is set stably and there is enough support from government, I'll be able to adopt a child and recommend it to many people I know.
강사 첨삭
Thank you so much for that [이름]! I\'m also very happy to meet you and to start my day speaking with you. It\'s been a fun yet productive months since we started. I\'m really looking forward to this year with you again. Have a great day!
T. Aurora
Happy New Year, Aurora!
>>Correct!I wish you all the best in 2013.
>>Correct!I was really happy to meet you last year and I promise I\'ll do my best this year as I have been doing.^^>>Correct!Would you ever adopt a child? Why or why not?Adopting a child is good for making our society happy and comfortable.
>>Correct!
However, there needs some help or support from the national policy and communities.
>>However, it needs some help or support from the national policy and communities.
That\'s because if I were to adopt a child, I would have responsibility for his or her behaviors and I might need some money to raise him or her.
>>Correct!
Moreover, there are still critical thoughts in this society now.
>>Correct!
So I don\'t like to adopt a child so far.
>>Correct!
However, when it is set stably and there is enough support from government, I\'ll be able to adopt a child and recommend it to many people I know.
>> However, when it is set stably and there is enough support from the government, I\'ll be able to adopt a child and recommend it to many people I know.
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