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학생이 쓴 원문
What was your most memorable New Year's celebration.
When I just finished my entrance exam for college, I went to the East sea by the train with my family to see the sunrise at the first day in 1998. It took about 10 hours to get there from my city. We departed at 8pm and scheduled to arrive at 6am. At that time, the train station 'Jeong Dong Jin' which we headed for was noted for its beautiful scenes after being pictured on the most popular soap opera. As we expected, there was a big crowd and we waited to see the sun. When I saw the sun above the horizontal line, it was fantastic and we couldn't say anything. I prayed for something I don't remember now. My family also enjoyed delicious seafood and visited museums and old village. Even though I failed the entrance exam at the year, but I could start over my study again thinking I could do everything like the power of the Sun.
강사 첨삭
I\'ve heard from my previous students that watching the sunrise on the first day of the year is special and almost nostalgic to many Koreans. I think you managed to really prove yourself through the years that passed after that day in 1998 because now you are a successful doctor and not only that, a proud father to be. Best wishes once again for this coming year. May this year be even more successful for us. ^^
T. Aurora
What was your most memorable New Year\'s celebration.When I just finished my entrance exam for college, I went to the East sea by the train with my family to see the sunrise at the first day in 1998.
>>When I just finished my entrance exam for college, I went to the East sea by train with my family to see the sunrise on the first day of 1998.
It took about 10 hours to get there from my city.
>>Correct!
We departed at 8pm and scheduled to arrive at 6am.
>> We departed at 8 PM and was scheduled to arrive at 6 AM.
At that time, the train station \'Jeong Dong Jin\' which we headed for was noted for its beautiful scenes after being pictured on the most popular soap opera.
>>Correct!
As we expected, there was a big crowd and we waited to see the sun.
>>Correct!
When I saw the sun above the horizontal line, it was fantastic and we couldn\'t say anything.
>> When I saw the sun on the horizon, it was fantastic and we were speechless.
I prayed for something I don\'t remember now.
>>I prayed for something but I don\'t remember it now.
My family also enjoyed delicious seafood and visited museums and old village.
>> My family also enjoyed delicious seafood and visited museums and old villages.
Even though I failed the entrance exam at the year, but I could start over my study again thinking I could do everything like the power of the Sun.
>>Even though I failed the entrance exam on the year, I started over my studies again thinking I could do everything like the power of the Sun.
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