Composition

2013-08-23 · 첨삭 강사 Chelsea

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Actually, I prefer work for someone else. Because employees need not have big burden. For example, if I am self-employee or I have own a business, I feel big burden how to run or budget. In additiin, if customers are a few, owners are getting stressful. So in my opinion, employees are more comportable.

강사 첨삭

Hi there! 

Thanks for sharing your thoughts here.

Anyway, your idea was comprehensive enough that I already had some second thoughts on which view I am going to agree with. haha.^^

Thanks for that. And you really did a good job.^^

I\'ll see you!

Enjoy your weekend! ^^

T. Giselle^^

 Actually, I prefer work for someone else.
>> Actually, I prefer to work for someone else.
Because employees need not have big burden.
>> Because employees need not to have big burdens.
For example, if I am self-employee or I have own a business, I feel big burden how to run or budget.
>> For example, if I am self-employed or I have my own business, I always feel a  big burden on how to run it or how to budget the money.
In additiin, if customers are a few, owners are getting stressful.
>> In addition, if customers are few, owners are are getting stressed. 
So in my opinion, employees are more comportable.

>> So in my opinion, being an employee is more comfortable.

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