Composition
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi there!
Thanks for sharing your thoughts here.
Anyway, your idea was comprehensive enough that I already had some second thoughts on which view I am going to agree with. haha.^^
Thanks for that. And you really did a good job.^^
I\'ll see you!
Enjoy your weekend! ^^
T. Giselle^^
Actually, I prefer work for someone else.
>> Actually, I prefer to work for someone else.
Because employees need not have big burden.
>> Because employees need not to have big burdens.
For example, if I am self-employee or I have own a business, I feel big burden how to run or budget.
>> For example, if I am self-employed or I have my own business, I always feel a big burden on how to run it or how to budget the money.
In additiin, if customers are a few, owners are getting stressful.
>> In addition, if customers are few, owners are are getting stressed.
So in my opinion, employees are more comportable.
>> So in my opinion, being an employee is more comfortable.
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