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Yes, I agree with this statement.
Because they are lack of controlling their impulses.
In addition, on internet there are so many violent and indecent things.
So it affects them badly.
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Yes, I agree with this statement.>> Correct.Because they are lack of controlling their impulses.
>> Because they lack control on their impulses.In addition, on internet there are so many violent and indecent things.>> In addition, there are so many violent and indecent things on the Internet.So it affects them badly.
>> Correct.
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