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2011-02-21 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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Dear [Name]. [Name], Hello. How was your weekend? I'm so tired. Because I could't slet enough time during weekend. So...Then... I will request order number to My boss. Would you please give me a information about order number? And I will change my tasks and we will start training new tasks now. My heart is throbbing with expectation about new tasks. Actually I have to do my new tasks like a specialist from next month. Anyway,,my dear Camille, Have a nice day. ByeBye

강사 첨삭

Wow my dear Bella, you are such a very hard working lady.
You also need to give time for yourself okay?
Dont overwork, but just continue being a very good employee..
Im very proud of you my dear Bella!
Anyway, these are the few corrections in your composition:
Talk to you again tomorrow my dear and always take care of yourself..
T.Cam
Dear [Name]. [Name],
Hello.
How was your weekend?

>>correct!
I'm so tired.

>>correct!
Because I could't slet enough time during weekend.

>>Because I couldn't have much sleep last weekend.

So...Then...
I will request order number to My boss.

>>I will request my boss about the Order number.
Would you please give me a information about order number?

>>Would you please give me some information about the order number?
And I will change my tasks and we will start training new tasks now.

>.correct!
My heart is throbbing with expectation about new tasks.

>.correct!
Actually I have to do my new tasks like a specialist from next month.

>>correct!
Anyway,,my dear Camille,

>.correct!
Have a nice day.

ByeBye.

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