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2014-11-05 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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Dear my committed Teacher Paula! Good morning! ^^ Did you have a good sleep last night? In my case, I didn't fall asleep well because of the mosquito. Generally, mosquitos disappear at this time of the year, but those are still alive until now. I really hate them when they bite me. Today, I am going to put up a mosquito net again!!! How about you in the Philippines? Is the mosquito bothering you? I am just hoping for keeping your precious blood from them. Hahaha~ ^^ As you already told me, you also wear thick clothes not to get sick because of the weather. I hope you keep your health. Bye! Take care! See you. ^^

강사 첨삭

Dear my amazing Student [이름],

 

A terrific Wednesday evening to you! ^^

I had a great sleep last night.

My parents made sure I could sleep very well.

They stayed up for me.

However, I feel bad, because my parents didn\'t sleep well last night. T.T

 

By the way, here in the Philippines, it is really getting colder day-by-day.

Therefore, the number of mosquitoes is decreasing.

I still see few mosquitoes at home.

My family and I just wear sweaters, jackets and pants to avoid mosquito bites.

It is very dangerous to be bitten by mosquitoes.

They might be carriers of Dengue.

You must really use a mosquito net for you to prevent mosquitoes from biting you and from getting Dengue.

 

I hope for your health too! ^^

Take care always! ^^,

See you! ^^.

 

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

 

 

Dear my committed Teacher Paula!

>> Dear my committed Teacher Paula, (When you use DEAR for a common letter, use a comma at the end of your greeting.)
Good morning! ^^
>> CORRECT!

Did you have a good sleep last night?
>> CORRECT!

In my case, I didn\'t fall asleep well because of the mosquito.
>> In my case, I didn\'t fall asleep well because of a mosquito. (If it is your first time to introduce an experience, use A not THE.)

Generally, mosquitos disappear at this time of the year, but those are still alive until now.
>> Generally, mosquitoes disappear at this time of the year, but those are still alive until now. (Spelling of mosquitoes.)

I really hate them when they bite me.
>> CORRECT!

Today, I am going to put up a mosquito net again!!!
>> CORRECT!

How about you in the Philippines?
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: How about you there in the Philippines?

Is the mosquito bothering you?
>> Are mosquitoes bothering you? (When you make a general thought, don\'t use THE.)

I am just hoping for keeping your precious blood from them. Hahaha~ ^^
>> CORRECT!

As you already told me, you also wear thick clothes not to get sick because of the weather.
>> CORRECT!

I hope you keep your health.
>> CORRECT!

Bye!

>> CORRECT!

>> OR: See You!

Take care!
>> CORRECT!

See you. ^^

>> CORRECT!

>> OR: See you!

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