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2014-11-11 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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Dear my smart Teacher Paula, Good morning! I enjoy my class with you every day, and I am reviewing my last class now. Whenever I listen to my last class again, I feel a little shy and ashamed. And then, I think that how come I answered like that, I felt really stupid. I feel that learning English is a very difficult thing suddenly, but I am going to keep studying it with you in the future as long as I have time after work. By the way, I searched something about the Philippines. You are living in Baguio city, and it is located above Manila, am I correct? The average temperature is 15~25 degrees Celsius, and current season is a little cold. Apparently, there is a big difference of temperature between day and night. In the current season, you should more take care of your health not to have a cold. Don't work too hard. Sometimes, you need to make yourself relaxed. ^^ See you! [이름]

강사 첨삭

Dear my clever Student [이름]! ^.^

 

THANK YOU for your good comments! ^^

However, I don\'t like you telling yourself negative things.

Being shy or ashamed is okay, but the word stupid is not good.

Don\'t feel that you are stupid.

You should be happy, because you can speak English.

In addition, you are doing your best to master it.

You should be proud of yourself! ^^

 

Anyway, let\'s talk about your research! ^^

You are right.

Baguio City is located above Manila from the Philippine map.

You are also correct with the temperature.

Unfortunately, there\'s really a big difference between night and day here in my region.

It is very cold early in the morning and evening.

However, it\'s very hot from 10 am to 4 pm.

Frankly speaking, I feel a little bit weird now because of the drastic change in temperature and weather.

You should also be more careful of your health now.

Christmas is coming very fast, so it is also getting colder and colder there every day.

 

That\'s all for now! ^^

Keep safe! ^^,

See you tomorrow! ^^.

 

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

 

 

Dear my smart Teacher Paula,
>> CORRECT!

Good morning!
>> CORRECT!

I enjoy my class with you every day, and I am reviewing my last class now.
>> CORRECT!

Whenever I listen to my last class again, I feel a little shy and ashamed.
>> CORRECT!

And then, I think that how come I answered like that, I felt really stupid.
>> CORRECT!

I feel that learning English is a very difficult thing suddenly, but I am going to keep studying it with you in the future as long as I have time after work. 

>> CORRECT!

>> OR: I feel that learning English is a very difficult thing suddenly, but I am going to keep studying it with you in the future as long as I have time after my work. 
By the way, I searched something about the Philippines.
>> CORRECT!

You are living in Baguio city, and it is located above Manila, am I correct?
>> You are living in Baguio City, and it is located above Manila, am I correct? (Capitalize the first letter of CITY.)

The average temperature is 15~25 degrees Celsius, and current season is a little cold.
>> CORRECT!

Apparently, there is a big difference of temperature between day and night.
>> CORRECT!

In the current season, you should more take care of your health not to have a cold.
>> In the current season, you should take care of your health more not to have  a cold. (It is better to put MORE after a noun or a verb.)

>> OR: In the current season, you should take care more of your health not to have  a cold.

Don\'t work too hard.
>> CORRECT!

Sometimes, you need to make yourself relaxed. ^^
>> CORRECT!

See you!
>> CORRECT!

[이름]

>> CORRECT!

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