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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Dear my stupendous Student [이름],
A terrific Monday to the both of us! ^^
You are indeed correct.
Today is the start of a new week.
I hope I can make us start this day right.
It is to make our week right, too. ^^
By the way, my weekend was great.
I met my friends.
We talk about our friends\' wedding preparations.
It was a fun talk.
We talked with food and drinks.
Hahaha ~~~ ^^
We even went to a disco after our discussion.
It was really an amazing time.
About the typhoon, all is well in my case.
The typhoon is called \"Ruby\" here in the Philippines.
It is a strong one.
Many people were really forced to evacuate.
Our government doesn\'t want another tragedy to happen.
I really hope it won\'t make a lot of destruction and get a lot of lives.
Thank you for your concern! ^^
You must take care, too! ^.^
... Teacher Paula ... ^.~
P.S.: About your composition, I think you still have a problem with PLURALIZATION.
Please see the corrections and suggestions I made for your improvement.
If you have questions, please be free to ask me. ^^
Dear my free-hearted Teacher Paula,
>> CORRECT!
Good day.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: Good day!
It is the start of a new week.
>> CORRECT!
How was your weekend?
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: How did you do last weekend?
I heard that a big typhoon \'HAGUPIT\' hit the Philippines, and many people had to be evacuated.
>> CORRECT!
It seems like a really big typhoon.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: It seems like it is a really big typhoon.
I hope you are in safe place and not damaged from it.
>> CORRECT!
Be careful.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: Be careful!
[이름]
>> CORRECT!
*Essay
In my case, when I was a student, I attended girl\'s middle and high school.
>> In my case, when I was a student, I attended girls\' middle and high schools. (I think you forgot to put S at the end of SCHOOL. When you give two types of schools, it is really needed to make the SCHOOL plural.)
>> OR: In my case, when I was a student, I attended all-girls middle and high schools.
Looking back, I seemed to envy students who attend coeducational schools.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: Looking back, I seemed to envy students who attend mixed-sex education schools.
They had a good relationship with friends of the opposite sex, and the relationships even were natural.
>> They had good relationships with their friends of the opposite sex, and the relationships even were natural. (You already made the second RELATIONSHIP plural, so it is better to make the first RELATIONSHIP plural also. In additional, since your subject in plural, the object should be plural, too.)
They didn\'t have any awkward manners between boys and girls, and they were completely open with each other.
>> CORRECT!
These kinds of manners are formed by their experiences, and it is a very important learning in relationships.
>> CORRECT!
I like this natural feeling between friends of the opposite sex.
>> CORRECT!
If I could get back to the past, I would prefer to attend a coeducational school.
>> CORRECT!
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