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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Dear my plucky Student [이름],
A magnificent Thursday to you! ^.^
Thanks for letting me know about your regular holidays there in Korea! ^^
In my opinion, your holidays are too few.
Is that okay for you?
About your concern regarding the holidays I told you, definitely, most Filipinos don\'t have work on those dates.
However, there are still a few of us who have.
I don\'t know if Power English Management will make those days as our holidays also.
I don\'t really expect anything, but as long as December 25 and January 1 are your holidays in Korea, for sure we won\'t have work on those days.
By the way, let\'s talk about your composition.
Ondol is a very interesting invention.
However, I think we won\'t need it here in the Philippines.
As you already know, we don\'t experience winter, so we don\'t really need to use Ondol.
On the other hand, I think it would still be great to experience using it.
It would be a fun time playing on the floor without thinking of the cold.
Hahaha! ^^
I can play with my nieces on the floor without any worries.
Suddenly, I want to avail one Ondol.
Hahaha! ^^
Anyway, I am really glad that I learned a new thing about your country.
Thank you very much! ^^
That\'s all for now! ^^,
See you very very soon! ^^,
... Teacher Paula ... ^.~
P.S.: Don\'t forget to see the corrections and suggestions below.
Enjoy reading! ^.^
Dear my cordial Teacher Paula,
>> CORRECT!
Good morning.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: Good morning!
You informed me your regular holidays in the Philippines, and these are Dec 24,25,30,31.
>> You informed me your regular holidays in the Philippines, and these are December 24, 25, 30 and 31. (It is better to complete the name of a month, and you forgot to put AND before 31.
>> You informed me about your regular holidays in the Philippines, and these are December 24, 25, 30 and 31.
Do you work during these holidays?
>> CORRECT!
I hope Power English can let you have a good rest during these days.
>> CORRECT!
For your reference, our national holidays are Dec 25 and Jan 1. ^^
>> For your reference, our national holidays are December 25 and January 1. (I really encourage you to complete months\' names.)
See you very soon.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: See you very soon!
[이름]
>> CORRECT!
*Essay
>> CORRECT!
>> BETTER: P.S.: Below is my homework.
I don\'t know if I can call it as custom, but I want to introduce it to foreigners.
>> CORRECT!
That is the Korean floor heating system \'Ondol\'.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: It is the Korean floor heating system \'Ondol\'.
>> OR: It is the Korean floor heating system called \'Ondol\'.
>> OR: It is the \'Ondol\' which is a Korean floor heating system.
Ondol is very useful in the cold weather, and we can\'t live without this.
>> CORRECT!
As you know, Korea is a sedentary lifestyle; Ondol is suitable for this kind of lifestyle.
>> As you know, in Korea, we have a sedentary lifestyle; Ondol is suitable for this kind of lifestyle. (Korea is not a sedentary lifestyle, right? It is a country. So, it is better to make KOREA to KOREANS and IS to HAVE.)
>> OR: As you know, in Korea, we have a sedentary lifestyle. Ondol is suitable for this kind of lifestyle.
>> OR: As you know, Koreans have a sedentary lifestyle. Ondol is suitable for this kind of lifestyle.
When we are sitting on the ondol floor, we can feel our bodies start to thaw out.
>> When we are sitting on the Ondol floor, we can feel our bodies start to thaw out. (I think ONDOL is a proper noun, so it\'s first letter should be capitalized.)
>> OR: When we sit on the Ondol floor, we can feel our bodies start to thaw out. (When you give a fact, it is better to use present simple verbs.)
This ondol system has been exported to many countries, and it is being spotlighted as a good heating system.
>> CORRECT!
>> BETTER: This system has been exported to many countries, and it is being spotlighted as a good heating system. (It is better to avoid REDUNDANCY.)
I hope you also can experience our traditional heating system someday.
>> I hope you can also experience our traditional heating system someday. (ALSO should be put after be-verbs and before main do-verbs.)
I am sure that you will like it.
>> CORRECT!
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