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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Dear my unstoppable Student [이름],
Greetings! ^^
Fantastic! ~~~ ^.^
I am giving you eight out of ten for doing your composition.
Your idea about the given topic is so satisfying.
Something really caught my attention.
You considered nature in your writing.
That\'s good! ^^,
You are totally correct when you said that we should stop from developing.
Instead, we should give more attention to the environment we have.
We should take care of the planet we are living in.
We should protect it from the bad effect of development.
That\'s all for today! ^^
See you very soon! ^^,
... Teacher Paula ... ^.~
P.S.: Wow! ^^ You are going to attend a wedding. I thin this month is really the wedding month. I want to see your friend\'s future wife. Since you said that she is beautiful, I am really curious how pretty she is. Anyway, this coming weekend, I will help my mother to prepare for my older sister\'s daughter\'s 4th birthday party. It will be on Sunday, so we will be very busy starting tomorrow. Hahaha! ^^
Dear my tender Teacher Paula,
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Good day.
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>> OR: Good day!
Today is Friday, and I am really happy that my resting time is coming.
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What are you supposed to do this weekend?
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In my case, I am planning to attend my friend\'s wedding tomorrow.
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My friend is a lucky man, because he got such a beautiful bride.
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I heartily give them blessing to their marriage.
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See you soon, and below is my homework.
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[이름]
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*Essay
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Yes, I think so.
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>> OR: I aggre with the given statement.
Technology makes our lives more convenient and comfortable, and faster.
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>> OR: Technology makes our lives more convenient, comfortable and faster.
It is indispensable in our lives.
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Let\'s imagine that we can\'t enjoy technology.
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>> OR: Let\'s imagine that technology wasn\'t found.
If technology disappeared, we might seem to get back to the past.
>> If technology disappears, we might seem to get back to the past. (Remember the rules for conditionals. When the if-sentence is past, the other sentence should have a past idea.)
>> OR: If technology disappeared, we might have seemed to get back to the past.
However, the current level of technology is enough to enjoy our lives.
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We need to refrain from attempting excessive development and focus on environmental protection.
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We must protect our precious environment.
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Otherwise, we might be faced with an unexpected difficulty.
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