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Dear [Name].Bentele, Good evening! I have some requests about Certification of audit . You can find Invoice for audit fee of Quality and reisekosten as seen below. Actually, concerns is Mr. [Name] . But he is not here and we have to receive an answer whether we should pay or not. So, would you please confirm and give me an answer as soon as possible whether we should pay or not. I'm looking forward for your reply. If you have any questions please let Mr.Park know. Bye Bye.

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Dear [Name]. [Name]:
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Good evening!
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I have some requests about Certification of audit.
>>I have some requests about the Certification of audit.
You can find Invoice for audit fee of Quality and reisekosten as seen below.
>>You can find Quality Invoice for audit and reisekosten as seen below.
Actually, concerns is Mr. [Name].
>>Actually, the one concerned is Mr. [Name].
But he is not here and we have to receive an answer whether we should pay or not.
>>However, he is not here and we have to receive an answer whether we should pay or not.
So, would you please confirm and give me an answer as soon as possible whether we should pay or not.
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I'm looking forward for your reply.
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If you have any questions please let Mr.Park know.
>>If you have any question, please let Mr. [Name] know.
Bye Bye.

>>Correct

>>However, in a formal letter you don't actually say bye bye.