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2015-01-20 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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Dear my Teacher Paula, Good evening. I am happy to see you today, and I really enjoyed my class with you. I hope Power English will not give you a bad evaluation because of your absences. Moreover, I hope you will keep your health not to suffer from your hard stomachache any more. Go easy on yourself. Don't work so hard. ^^ See you tomorrow. *Essay To search information, I usually go to NAVER. That is one of our representative websites here in Korea. The secondary website that I usually go to is DAUM. I think DAUM seems to report all of news objectively. That’s why I go to DAUM to check daily news by mobile phone when I go to work.

강사 첨삭

Dear [Name] [이름],

Good morning! ^^

Happy Tuesday! ^.^

I also enjoyed our class last night.

I think I will really get a bad evaluation.

Don\'t worry!

They gave me a warning already about my absences.

I feel more responsible now not to be absent anymore.

Thanks for the understanding and care! ^^

Thank you also for the reminders! ^^,

I will be healthy.

I will do my best not to be sick anymore.

Anyway, have a great day ahead! ^^

See you later! ^.^

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

Dear my Teacher Paula,

>> CORRECT!
Good evening.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: Good evening!

I am happy to see you today, and I really enjoyed my class with you.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: I am glad to see you today, and I really enjoyed my class with you.

I hope Power English will not give you a bad evaluation because of your absences.
>> CORRECT!

Moreover, I hope you will keep your health not to suffer from your hard stomachache any more.
>> Moreover, I hope you will keep your health not to suffer from severe stomachache anymore. (It is better to use SEVERE than HARD. ANYMORE is one word.)

Go easy on yourself.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: Go easy on yourself!

Don\'t work so hard. ^^
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: Don\'t work so hard.

See you tomorrow.
>> CORRECT!

>> See you tomorrow!

*Essay

To search information, I usually go to NAVER.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: To search information I usually go to Naver.

That is one of our representative websites here in Korea.
>> CORRECT!

The secondary website that I usually go to is DAUM.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: The secondary website that I usually go to is Daum.

>> OR: The secondary website that I usually visit is Daum.

I think DAUM seems to report all of news objectively.
>> CORRECT!

That’s why I go to DAUM to check daily news by mobile phone when I go to work.

>> CORRECT!

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