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2015-01-21 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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Dear my Teacher Paula, Good day! It is been a long time since we studied our book. I also like learning our book with you. ^^ Anyway, I want to hand in today's composition as follows. Have a nice evening. ^^ *Essay In my case, I have some reasons to study English. First, I need to talk to foreigners at my work. Before I started Power English, I only contacted them by E-mail. Whenever I really needed to express my opinion exactly by English, I have felt frustrated. Now, that kind of feeling seems to be removed a lot. ^^ Second, I really want to go around the world. In this case, speaking English is an essential condition for communication to each other. Third, English is a common language in the world. It will make me confident when I speak that fluently. That's why I think that I did a right choice.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Outgoing [이름]! ^.^

Good morning and happy Wednesday! ^^

Frankly speaking, sometimes, I feel like I am useless when we just have free talking.
On the other hand, after thinking things over, I realize that speaking freely with you is not useless.
It is because we can know each other well.
I am thankful that you share your whereabouts with me.
Thank you very much for being a very friendly person and student! ^^

Learning and studying English is very important nowadays, especially there in your country.
I use English when I talk to foreigners too.
Just like you.
I also speak English at my two jobs.
When you know other languages, you may feel more confident.
Your self-esteem goes higher.
It\'s nice to hear that your frustration when you speak English is removed.
I am so glad that you know you did the right choice.

Have a fantastic day ahead! ^^
See you later! ^^,

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~


Dear my Teacher Paula,

>> CORRECT!
Good day!
>> CORRECT!
It is been a long time since we studied our book. 
>> It has been a long time since we studied our book. (Your sentence is an example of a Present Perfect statement, so you should have the pattern \"HAS/HAVE + PP\".)
I also like learning our book with you. ^^
>> CORRECT!
Anyway, I want to hand in today\'s composition as follows. 
>> CORRECT!
Have a nice evening. ^^
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: Have a nice evening.

*Essay

In my case, I have some reasons to study English. 
>> CORRECT!
First, I need to talk to foreigners at my work. 
>> CORRECT!
Before I started Power English, I only contacted them by E-mail. 
>> Before I started at Power English, I only contacted them by e-mail. (Don\'t forget to use prepositions.)
>> BETTER: Before I started studying at Power English, I only contacted them by e-mail.
Whenever I really needed to express my opinion exactly by English, I have felt frustrated. 
>> CORRECT!
Now, that kind of feeling seems to be removed a lot. ^^ 
>> CORRECT!
Second, I really want to go around the world.
>> CORRECT!
In this case, speaking English is an essential condition for communication to each other.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: In this case, speaking English is essential for communication with other people.
>> OR: In this case, speaking English is an essential thing for communicating with people who don\'t know my language.
Third, English is a common language in the world. 
>> CORRECT!
It will make me confident when I speak that fluently. 
>> CORRECT!
That\'s why I think that I did a right choice.
>> CORRECT!

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