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2015-02-09 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

학생이 쓴 원문

Dear my Teacher Paula, Good morning. Did you enjoy your weekend? I just checked your comments against my last composition. Let me clarify more that to you. Here in Korea, we have a university entrance examination in November every year. All of examinees who want to enter university can take an examination, and there is no limitation of times to apply for the test. However, normally, we take an examination at the last year of high school, and that is 3rd year high school here in Korea. If someone fails to get into a university that the person aims to because of the low grade, the person can take an examination again next year by the person's decision. Regardless of their age, everyone can take an examination as long as they want to get into a university. It depends on all examinees'decisions. I hope this composition makes you understand clearly more than last one. ^^ See you very soon.

강사 첨삭

Dear my great Student [이름],

WOW! ^^

Now, it\'s totally clear.

Thanks for the clarification! ^^

What a wonderful writing! ^^.

Anyway, see you tomorrow! ^^

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

Dear my Teacher Paula,
>> CORRECT!
Good morning.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: Good morning!

Did you enjoy your weekend?
>> CORRECT!

I just checked your comments against my last composition.
>> CORRECT!

>> BETTER: I just checked your comments about my last composition.

Let me clarify more that to you.
>> CORRECT!

Here in Korea, we have a university entrance examination in November every year.
>> CORRECT!

All of examinees who want to enter university can take an examination, and there is no limitation of times to apply for the test.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: All examinees who want to enter universities can take an examination, and there is no limited times to apply for the test.

However, normally, we take an examination at the last year of high school, and that is 3rd year high school here in Korea.
>> CORRECT!

If someone fails to get into a university that the person aims to because of the low grade, the person can take an examination again next year by the person\'s decision.
>> If someone fails to get into the university that that person aims to because of a low grade, the person can take an examination again next year by the his or her decision. (Use articles correctly. Be sure not to have redundancy.)

Regardless of their age, everyone can take an examination as long as they want to get into a university.
>> Regardless of their ages, everyone can take an examination as long as they want to get into a university. (THEIR AGE means only one age. THEIR AGES means different ages.)

It depends on all examinees\'decisions.
>> It depends on all examinees\' decisions. (Put a space between EXAMINEES\' and DECISIONS.)

I hope this composition makes you understand clearly more than last one. ^^
>> I hope this composition makes you understand it clearly more than the last time. (PATTERN: THE + LAST + NOUN)

See you very soon.

>> CORRECT!

>> OR: See you very soon!

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