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Dear my Teacher Paula, Happy Friday! I think taking enough rest on weekend is also good plan for you. However, somehow, I feel that your friends won't let you have a rest. ^^ In my case, I am planning to tidy up my room to celebrate wonderful spring. I was lazy to clean my room during winter, so I really should clean it from cellar to rafter taking advantage of this coming weekend. The most important task is to remove bubble wrap which has been stuck on a window and door during winter. Do you know what it is for? Here in Korea, when winter is coming, we usually stick it on window to prevent heat loss. I have felt a little stuffy because of this, now I eventually can remove it. ^^ The more thought of that makes me feel refreshed. See you soon. ^^ *Essay I think Korean food is not only delicious, but also healthy. Our traditional foods have very clean taste, and are not oily. Korean food sets importance on nutrition of ingredient, so as long as we are not picky about dishes, there is nothing better than eating these. However, the only one that matters is too salty. Nowadays, many people focus on avoiding salty foods. I think we should keep our traditional food and develop recipe to lessen a salty taste at the same time.

Dear my Lovable Student [이름],   T.G.I.F.~~~!!! ^.^ Happy wonderful Friday! ^^   Ohhh~~~! T.T I didn\'t have class with you today. What happened? I was thinking you might have had an emergency. But, it is still good because you made your homework. I am happy because of your composition. It made me lessen my feeling of missing you. Furthermore, I feel good due to the good structure of your writing. I like it, and I enjoyed reading it. Very good! ^^   By the way, don\'t forget to see the corrections and suggestions for your composition further improvement.   Anyway, have a great weekend! ^^ See you on Monday! ^^,   ... Teacher Paula ... ^.~     Dear my Teacher Paula, >> CORRECT! Happy Friday!>> CORRECT! I think taking enough rest on weekend is also good plan for you.>> I think taking enough rest on weekend is also a good plan for you. (PATTERN: a/an + adjective + singular noun) However, somehow, I feel that your friends won\'t let you have a rest. ^^ >> CORRECT! In my case, I am planning to tidy up my room to celebrate wonderful spring.>> In my case, I am planning to tidy up my room to celebrate a wonderful spring. (PATTERN: a/an + adjective + name of a season) >> BETTER: In my case, I am planning to tidy my room up to celebrate a wonderful spring. I was lazy to clean my room during winter, so I really should clean it from cellar to rafter taking advantage of this coming weekend. >> CORRECT! >> OR: I was lazy to clean my room during winter, so I really should clean it from cellar to rafter to take advantage of this coming weekend. The most important task is to remove bubble wrap which has been stuck on a window and door during winter. >> The most important task is to remove some bubble wraps which have been stuck on my window and door during winter. (I think there are a lot of bubble wraps that are staying on your window and door. It is better to use BUBBLE WRAPS than BUBBLE WRAP. You should emphasize that the window and door that you are going to clean are yours. Therefore, don\'t forget to out MY before WINDOW.) Do you know what it is for? >> CORRECT! Here in Korea, when winter is coming, we usually stick it on window to prevent heat loss. >> Here in Korea, when winter comes, we usually stick them on our windows to prevent heat loss. (When you express a fact, you should make a SIMPLE PRESENT SENTENCE. It is better to say WINTER COMES than WINTER IS COMING.) I have felt a little stuffy because of this, now I eventually can remove it. ^^ >> I have felt a little stuffy because of them, now I eventually can remove them. (THIS and IT should be THEM sonce we are talking about the BUBBLE WRAPS. The more thought of that makes me feel refreshed. >> CORRECT! See you soon. ^^>> CORRECT!   *Essay I think Korean food is not only delicious, but also healthy. >> CORRECT! Our traditional foods have very clean taste, and are not oily. >> CORRECT! Korean food sets importance on nutrition of ingredient, so as long as we are not picky about dishes, there is nothing better than eating these. >> Korean food sets importance on nutrition of ingredients, so as long as we are not picky about dishes, there is nothing better than eating these. (INGREDIENT should be with S since there are more than two ingredients that are needed to make a meal.) However, the only one that matters is too salty. >> However, the only one that matters is that it is salty. (Make your sentence complete. Ask yourself some questions about your sentence like WHAT IS TOO SALTY?) >> OR: However, the only one that matters is the saltiness of this kind of food. Nowadays, many people focus on avoiding salty foods.>> CORRECT! I think we should keep our traditional food and develop recipe to lessen a salty taste at the same time. >> I think we should keep our traditional food and develop recipes to lessen their salty taste at the same time. (RECIPE should be RECIPES.)