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Dear my Teacher Paula, Good day. First of all, I am sorry about my absence of our last class. Suddenly, one of my best friends called me and asked me to meet her on last Friday' evening. She is one of my university friends and living in Incheon City. She has two children, so it is very hard for her to make her own time. Moreover, she is working as a maritime police, so her working time is not only irregular, she but also lives far from my place. That's why it is very hard for both of us to meet together. However, her mother-in-law took her children to country side, so she got free time after a long time. It's been a long time for both of us since we met each other the last time. There were a lot of stories to talk, so even we lost track of our time at that time. We were sorry to have to say goodbye, and we took a rain check on the next time. I was very happy that I could recall our memories of our university lives. Anyway, I'll see you this evening. ^^

Dear Eye-catching [이름],   A terrific Tuesday evening to you! ^.^   First of all, I would like to say sorry for my late reply for your composition. I hope you would forgive me.   By the way, thank you for updating me about your absence last Friday! ^^ I am really pleased on how you made your composition. I really understood the reason clearly. Thank you very much! ^^   Anyway, you did a good job on your composition! ^^ Very good! ^^, However, you need to check some corrections and suggestions I made for your composition.   That\'s all for now! ^^ See you tomorrow! ^^,   ... Teacher Paula ... ^.~     Dear my Teacher Paula, >> CORRECT!Good day. >> CORRECT! >> OR: Good day! >> OR: A good day to you! First of all, I am sorry about my absence of our last class. >> CORRECT! >> OR: First of all, I am sorry about my absence in our last class. Suddenly, one of my best friends called me and asked me to meet her on last Friday\' evening. >> Suddenly, one of my best friends called me and asked me to meet her last Friday evening. (There\'s no need to put an apostrophe before FRIDAY. The day at you indicated in your sentence serves as an adjective. You can\'t use ON and LAST together before a noun. PATTERN: last Friday evening or on Friday evening) She is one of my university friends and living in Incheon City. >> CORRECT! >> OR: She is one of my university friends and an Incheon citizen. She has two children, so it is very hard for her to make her own time. >> CORRECT! >> OR: She has two kids, so it is very hard for her to make her personal time. Moreover, she is working as a maritime police, so her working time is not only irregular, she but also lives far from my place. >> Moreover, she is working as a maritime police, so her working time is not only irregular, but she also lives far from my place. (PATTERN: subject + verb + NOT ONLY + object [NOT ONLY + verb + subject + object], BUT + subject + verb + ALSO + object) >> OR: Moreover, she is working as a maritime police, so not only is her working time irregular, but she also lives far from my place. That\'s why it is very hard for both of us to meet together. >> That\'s why it is very hard for both of us to meet each other. (MEET TOGETHER is wrong. It should be MEET EACH OTHER.) However, her mother-in-law took her children to country side, so she got free time after a long time. >> However, her mother-in-law took her children to the country side, so she got her free time after a long time. (You should put THE before COUNTRY SIDE.) >> BETTER: However, her mother-in-law took her children to the country side, so she became free after a long time of being occupied with her work and family.) It\'s been a long time for both of us since we met each other the last time. >> CORRECT! >> OR: It\'s been a long time for both of us since the last time we met each other. There were a lot of stories to talk, so even we lost track of our time at that time. >> CORRECT! >> BETTER: There were a lot of stories to talk about, so we even lost track of our time on that day. We were sorry to have to say goodbye, and we took a rain check on the next time. >> I THINK WHAT YOU MEAN IS: We were sorry to have to say goodbye, amd we took a rain check for the next time we see each other again. I was very happy that I could recall our memories of our university lives. >> CORRECT! Anyway, I\'ll see you this evening. ^^ >> CORRECT!