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Dear my Teacher Paula, Happy birthday to you! I'm sorry to give you a belated congratulatory message. I'm happy that you seemed to have a wonderful day with your friends and family. Anyway, I hand my today's composition in as follows. *Essay Here in Korea, water pollution is a serious problem we faced. There is a saying that people spend money like water. That is like a metaphor, and we can see that people use water without any difficulties through that. Our country is classified into water shortage nation, but I don't think people understand the seriousness. We can see a campaign slogan to save water everywhere, but until now it seems to be useless. As you know, waste of water leads to water pollution. The most primary reason that people waste water is that we can use water with ease, and it makes us not to feel the importance of water. To keep our precious water, first of all, we really need to change our minds about using water, and then, it should be needed to adjust water using charge higher than before. I think destroying natural resource is the most foolish behavior for human beings.

Dear [이름],   Good evening! ^.^ Happy Tuesday! ^^   Very good! ^^, You made a good composition. However, you still need to observe your grammar.   Anyway, thanks for the greeting! ^^ See you in class! ^^,   ... Teacher Paula ... ^.~     Dear my Teacher Paula, >> CORRECT! Happy birthday to you!>> CORRECT! >> OR: Belated happy birthday to you! I\'m sorry to give you a belated congratulatory message.>> CORRECT! I\'m happy that you seemed to have a wonderful day with your friends and family. >> CORRECT! Anyway, I hand my today\'s composition in as follows.>> CORRECT!   *Essay Here in Korea, water pollution is a serious problem we faced. >> Here in Korea, water pollution is a serious problem we are facing. (Concentrate on the present consept in your sentence.) There is a saying that people spend money like water. >> CORRECT! That is like a metaphor, and we can see that people use water without any difficulties through that. >> CORRECT! Our country is classified into water shortage nation, but I don\'t think people understand the seriousness.>> Our country is classified into a water shortage nation, but I don\'t think people understand the seriousness of this matter. (Use articles when needed. Don\'t forget to complete your sentences.) We can see a campaign slogan to save water everywhere, but until now it seems to be useless. >> CORRECT! As you know, waste of water leads to water pollution. >> CORRECT! The most primary reason that people waste water is that we can use water with ease, and it makes us not to feel the importance of water. >> The primary reason that people waste water is that we can use water with ease, and it makes us not to feel its importance. (Avoid redundancy.) To keep our precious water, first of all, we really need to change our minds about using water, and then, it should be needed to adjust water using charge higher than before. >> To keep our precious water, first of all, we really need to change our minds about using it, and then, water charges should be higher than before. (Avoid redundancy.) I think destroying natural resource is the most foolish behavior for human beings. >> CORRECT! >> OR: I think destroying natural resource is the most foolish behavior of human beings.