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2015-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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If your life had absolutely no limits and you could have it all and do whatever you wanted, what would you choose to have and what would you choose to do? Wow! It sounds really wonderful. If my life had no limits and I could have it all, I wouldn't work for money. I would travel all around the world and learn their culture to make myself better and understand them with no worries. I want to use more time just for myself. Most people spend their time to work and they miss so many things that they really need to enjoy and celebrate including me. Sometimes, I think that I don't really know why I work for. Hm!! I really want to have this life...

강사 첨삭

Good morning Ms. [이름]!!

Happy happy Friday!

Thanks for your time today and hopefully you would also enjoy your weekend.
See you again next week! Take care!


Always,

Kathrine ^^


If your life had absolutely no limits and you could have it all and do whatever you wanted, what would you choose to have and what would you choose to do?

Wow! It sounds really wonderful.

>> correct!

If my life had no limits and I could have it all, I wouldn\'t work for money.

>> correct!

I would travel all around the world and learn their culture to make myself better and understand them with no worries.

>> correct!

>> or; I would travel around the world and learn their culture to make myself better and understand them with no worries.

I want to use more time just for myself.

>> correct! 

>> or: I just want to have more time for myself.

Most people spend their time to work and they miss so many things that they really need to enjoy and celebrate including me.

>> correct!

>> or; Most people are spending their time working and missing many things that they really need to enjoy and to celebrate including me.

Sometimes, I think that I don\'t really know why I work for. Hm!!

>> Sometimes, I think that I don\'t really know the reason why I am working. Hm!

I really want to have this life...

>> correct!

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