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Dear my Loveable Student [이름],

Happy Tuesday! ^.^

You are right that kids should frequently go to hospital to check their health and take care of themselves.

By the way, you answered the essay question interestingly.

I enjoyed reading your composition.

However, there are still some points that you commit mistakes.

Check the corrections and suggestions that I made for your composition thoroughly.

Anyway, enjoy reading too! ^^

See you tomorrow! ^^,

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

Dear Teacher Paula,
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Goody day!
>> Good day! (I think you mistyped the Y at the end of GOOD.)

I saw your last reply, and I feel again that you are a very good aunt.
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I am happy to hear that your niece is okay now.
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>> OR: I am glad to hear that your niece is okay now.

I think all children really need to go to hospital frequently to care for their health.
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>> OR: In my opinion, kids need to go to hospital to have regular check up for their health.

She is luck for having such a good aunt like you.
>> She is lucky for having such a good aunt like you. (I think you forgot to type Y at the end of LUCK.)

See you very soon!
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*Essay

Here in Korea, there are lots of programs on TV, and I\'d like to introduce some types.
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>> OR: Here in Korea, there are lots of programs on TV, and I\'d like to introduce some of them.

First, we can watch daily news every day.
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In my case, I never miss those.
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Even if I feel a little that our government seems to control the broadcasting partly, but I can still receive a wide variety of information about what happened around me by those.
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>> OR: Even if I feel a little that our government seems to control the broadcasting partly, but I can still receive a wide variety of information about what is happening around me by those.

Second, reality shows are booming now, so many channels give the programs during prime time.
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One of those is named \'Limitless challenge\', and I am a fanatic of that.
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>> OR: One of those is named \'Unlimited Challenge\' and I am a fanatic of that.

That is broadcast on Saturdays\' evening, so I try to watch that in real-time on TV.
>> That is broadcasted on Saturday evening, so I try to watch that in real-time on TV. (You should make the main verb as BE + PP, because THAT receives the action. SATURDAY\'S EVENING is wrong. It should be SATURDAY EVENING or EVENINGS.)

I can say that is my energizer for my life.
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Third, traveling programs are also interesting, and it fulfills our needs without going abroad in person.
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I think those are really helpful for us to understand many counties\' cultures with ease.

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