Composition

Dear my Impeccable Student [이름],

Happy Thursday! ^.^

From your message, it seems that you are contented with my answer about your question yesterday.

I am really glad for that.

I hope I am thinking it right.

Don\'t worry!

I won\'t worry about you a lot.

Hahaha! ^^

I know that you can do things by your own.

I have trust in you.

By the way, I think most television stations in the world experience having limits in broadcasting.

I think it is just normal.

However, I agree with what you have said that your government is controlling your TV station too much.

There are many changes around us.

I think it is also time for TV stations to stand on their principles in broadcasting.

Anyway, that\'s all for now! ^^

See you in our class! ^^,

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

Dear my Teacher Paula,
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Good day.
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>> OR: Good day!

Thanks for your reply regarding my question.
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You are a very dedicated teacher.
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It is very helpful for me to improve my English skill. ^^
>> It is very helpful for me to improve my English skills. (You have different English skills, so always remember to say ENGLISH SKILLS not ENGLISH SKILL.)

Don\'t worry about me.
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I won\'t have any stresses about studying English, but I am just enjoying our class. ^^
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See you very soon.
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>> OR: See you very soon!

*Essay

Here in Korea, there are many channels on TV, and KBS is our state television.
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>> OR: Here in Korea, there are many channels in TV, and KBS is out state television station.

Every month, we pay a television fee about USD2.5, and electric bill contains that.

>> Every month, we pay a television fee about USD 2.5, and electric bill contains that. (There should be a space between USD and 2.5.)

>> OR: Every month, we pay a television fee about USD 2.5, and it is included in our electric bills.

I think KBS seems to be unable to broadcast all of programs freely.
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By its nature, they are under many of limits, so we can feel that those programs are a little boring.
>> By its nature, they are under many limits, so we can feel that those programs are a little boring. (MANY OF SOME THINGS is usually used as a subject. In your sentence, it should only be MANY + NOUN.)

>> OR: By its nature, they are under a lot of limits, so we can feel that those programs are a little boring.

Moreover, they have been controlled by our government, so they seem not to broadcast fairly.
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Sometimes, they give some information tendentiously, so we really need to have objective gaze.
>> Sometimes, they give some information tendentiously, so we really need to have an objective gaze. (PATTERN: a/an + adj. + noun)

Apart from that, they couldn\'t give a program with sexual, violent, or incendiary scenes in spite of keeping the dangerous level.
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Of course, those can affect people badly, but somehow they control that too much.
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That\'s okay.
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There are still a lot of programs we can choose.
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Now, I just hope our state television will be changed more innovatively.

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