Composition

Dear my Teacher Paula, Good day! Did you rest well? In my case, I went to have an oil change with my boyfriend on last Saturday. However, we had to wait for a long time, and finally we got an ail change after two and a half hours. Normally, we can fix the time with garage in advance on weekday, but they don't get any reservations of customers on weekend, so it made us waste our prime time. Next time, we really should take a day off to check our car. See you this evening! *Essay Here in Korea, young generation really gets influenced by lots of celebrities. Among those, entertainers are one of the most influential people, even young generation idolizes them. In the old days, when we asked students what they want to be in the future, the first rank of the answer was a teacher or president. However, nowadays, being an entertainer is their first answer. The moment I heard that, I felt very bitter. There are a lot of good jobs, but they don't dream of doing things they like, they just pursue fantasies unrealistically. I think the reason why they are thinking so is due to money and glamour. Of course, that is our older generation's fault. They really should feel responsible for keeping their dreams through reasonable and proper education.

Dear [Name] [이름],   Happy Monday! ^.^   Wow~~~! ^^ Weekend has passed. I enjoyed it though I didn\'t rest a lot. Hahaha! ^^ As a whole, I can say that I had a fantastic week with my family.   By the way, I feel a little bit disappointed with the poor service they gave to you and to your boyfriend when you had your change oil. However, I still think that even if you had that wasting of time thing, you still enjoyed a wonderful weekend. Am I right? ^^   Anyway, don\'t forget to see the corrections and suggestions I made for your composition improvement. ^^ See you very soon! ^^,   ... Teacher Paula ... ^.~     Dear my Teacher Paula, >> CORRECT! Good day!>> CORRECT! Did you rest well? >> CORRECT! In my case, I went to have an oil change with my boyfriend on last Saturday. >> In my case, I went to have an oil change with my boyfriend last Saturday. (PATTERN: last Saturday or on Saturday) However, we had to wait for a long time, and finally we got an ail change after two and a half hours. >> However, we had to wait for a long time, and finally we got an oil change after two and a half hours. (I think you mistyped OIL.) Normally, we can fix the time with garage in advance on weekday, but they don\'t get any reservations of customers on weekend, so it made us waste our prime time. >> CORRECT! Next time, we really should take a day off to check our car. >> CORRECT! See you this evening! >> CORRECT!   *Essay Here in Korea, young generation really gets influenced by lots of celebrities. >> CORRECT! Among those, entertainers are one of the most influential people, even young generation idolizes them. >> CORRECT! In the old days, when we asked students what they want to be in the future, the first rank of the answer was a teacher or president. >> CORRECT! >> OR: In the old days, when students were asked about what they wanted to be in the future, most of them would choose to become a teacher or president. However, nowadays, being an entertainer is their first answer. >> CORRECT! The moment I heard that, I felt very bitter. >> CORRECT! There are a lot of good jobs, but they don\'t dream of doing things they like, they just pursue fantasies unrealistically. >> CORRECT! I think the reason why they are thinking so is due to money and glamour. >> CORRECT! >> OR: ... glamor. Of course, that is our older generation\'s fault. >> CORRECT! They really should feel responsible for keeping their dreams through reasonable and proper education. >> CORRECT!