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2015-03-31 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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Dear my Teacher Paula, Good morning. Sorry for my absence yesterday. I didn't want to skip our class yesterday, but because of the terrible traffic here, I could not get to my house on time, so I couldn't help to postpone our class. By the way, here in Korea, it is the terrible yellow dust again today. I really should wear a mask to protect my respiratory organs whenever I go out. It is very inconvenient. It is because I usually put on glasses, and whenever I breathe, my glasses steam up. ^^;; I wish I would live in an area where the air is clean. How about there? I think there is no problem to breath. You are lucky. ^^ According to the weather forecast, it will rain this afternoon until tomorrow. I think it will solve this problem a little. A rainy day would be good rather than a shiny day in this case. See you very soon.

강사 첨삭

Dear my marvelous Student [이름],

 

A terrific Tuesday! ^.^

Happy day! ^^

 

First of all, let me say I MISS YOU.

Yesterday was not a complete day.

You made me miss you a lot.

Well, don\'t worry. ^^

I understand you. ^^,

 

By the way, here in the Philippines, we don\'t really experience the yellow dust that is coming from China.

We are really lucky.

However, I am worried about your situation there.

I know that that kind of dust is really dangerous.

You should use a special mask.

 

Anyway, I really hope that the rain can totally make the yellow dust disappear.

 

That\'s all for now! ^^

See you very soon! ^^,

 

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

 

 

Dear my Teacher Paula,
>> CORRECT!

Good morning.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: Good morning!

Sorry for my absence yesterday.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: I am sorry for being absent yesterday in our class.

I didn\'t want to skip our class yesterday, but because of the terrible traffic here, I could not get to my house on time, so I couldn\'t help to postpone our class.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: I didn\'t want to skip our class yesterday, but because of the terrible traffic on my way home, I couldn\'t get to my house on time, so I couldn\'t help to postpone it.

By the way, here in Korea, it is the terrible yellow dust again today.
>> I THINK WHAT YOU WANT TO SAY IS: By the way, here in Korea, there is the terrible yellow dust again today.

I really should wear a mask to protect my respiratory organs whenever I go out.
>> CORRECT!

It is very inconvenient.
>> CORRECT!

It is because I usually put on glasses, and whenever I breathe, my glasses steam up. ^^;;
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: It is because I usuallu put on my glasses, and whenever I breathe, my glasses steam up.

I wish I would live in an area where the air is clean.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: I wish I could live in an area where there\'s clean air.

How about there?
>> CORRECT!

I think there is no problem to breath.
>> I think there is no problem to breathe. (I think you forgot to type E at the last part of BREATH.)

You are lucky. ^^
>> CORRECT!

According to the weather forecast, it will rain this afternoon until tomorrow.
>> CORRECT!

I think it will solve this problem a little.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: I think it will solve this problem somehow.

A rainy day would be good rather than a shiny day in this case.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: A rainy day would be good rather then a sunny day in this case.

See you very soon.

>> CORRECT!

>> OR: See you soon!

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