Composition

Dear [이름],

A wonderful Wednesday to you! ^.^

First of all, I would like to say THANK YOU for the appreciation. ^^

It\'s giving me energy, especially now that I am not really feeling well.

THANK YOU also for trying to make your homework though you are really busy.

By the way, I didn\'t take any sleeping pills last night.

I didn\'t have any at home, and I am a little bit scared of taking them.

I know that I might experience some side effects if I use them.

You are not really scolding me.

You are just reminding me.

Anyway, don\'t forget to check the corrections and suggestions below.

Happy reading! ^^

See you tomorrow! ^^,

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

Dear my Teacher Paula,
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Happy Wednesday!
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I suddenly feel that you did really make dedicated notes against my composition.
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>> OR: I suddenly feel that you did really make notes dedicatedly for my composition improvement.

I really appreciate you helping like that way.
>> I THINK WHAT YOU WANT TO SAY IS: I really appreciate you helping me like that.

>> OR: I really appreciate you helping me in that way.

That\'s why I could not skip my daily composition no matter how busy I am. ^^
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>> OR: That\'s why I couldn\'t skip making my daily composition no matter how occupied I am.

Anyway, did your sleeping pill help to make you fall into a deep sleep?
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>> OR: Anyway, did your sleeping pills help you fall into a deep sleep?

I think you already knew that there is a big possibility to lead to insomnia if we take excessive pills.
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>> OR: I think you already knew that there is a big possibility for a person to have insomnia due to excessive intake of pills.

I am suddenly scolding you too much. ^^;;
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I really hope I can see your bouncy personality in our class again. ^^
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See you tonight!
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*Essay

These days, many people prefer to do internet shopping more than offline shopping.
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>> OR: Nowadays, a lot of people prefer shopping online than offline.

There are some reasons for people doing like that.
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>> OR: There are some reasons why they have this kind of behavior now.

First, online is cheaper than offline.
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>> OR: First, online shopping is cheaper than offline buying.

In my case, I usually use a shopping site named \'GMARKET\', and this provides us a variety of coupons.
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>> OR: In my case, I usually shop on \'GMARKET\', and this provides us a variety of coupons.

If I use those on items that I want to buy properly, I could get a discount up to approximately 10%.
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>> OR: If I use those on items that I ought to buy correctly, I could get a discount up to approximately 10%.

Second, I don\'t need to go shopping at offline shops in person.
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>> OR: Second, I don\'t need to go shopping offline in person.

As you know, there are a large number of people shopping on weekends, and there is no place to put my feet.
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>> OR: As you already know, there are a great number of people going out to shop on weekends, and there aren\'t any places to put my feet.

I dislike this kind of crowded places.
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>> OR: I dislike being in this kind of crowded places.

Finally, there are no any difficulties for us to take things back to the shop.
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>> OR: Finally, there aren\'t any difficulties for us to take things back to the shop.

Even I could do that for free.
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That\'s why there is no reason why I should not do online shopping.

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>> OR: That\'s why there aren\'t any reasons why I shouldn\'t do online shopping.