Composition
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi there, my Student [이름]!
A stress-free Tuesday night to us! ^.^
To start, I would like to thank you for reading my replies with pleasure.
Hahaha! ^^
By the way, Teacher Julie\'s friend is a female.
I really feel sad about her friend.
She is so young to go to heaven, but I know that wherever she is now, she is happy and enjoying.
We will all die.
It\'s just she left earlier than us.
Anyway, I am trying to have a good relationship with my co-workers at Power English.
I like being with other people.
Hahaha! ^^
Anyhow, thanks for the story.
Now, I can have an idea about the movie you are recommending me to watch.
That\'s all for now, but don\'t forget to see the suggestions and corrections below for your writing improvement.
Enjoy your time! ^^
See you tomorrow! ^^,
... Teacher Paula ... ^.~
Dear my Teacher Paula,
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Good morning!
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Through your reply, I could feel your happiness with other teachers last weekend.
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Meanwhile, I am sorry to hear that teacher Julie\'s friend passed away because of cancer.
>> Meanwhile, I am sorry to hear that Teacher Julie\'s friend passed away because of cancer. (C1 When you include a person\'s name with her or his position, the first letter of that person\'s position should be capitalized. Examples: Student [이름])
>> OR: Meanwhile, I am sorry to hear about Teacher Julie\'s friend passing because of cancer.
>> OR: Meanwhile, I am sorry to hear about Teacher Julie\'s friend loss of life because of cancer.
I am not sure if the friend is a guy or a girl, but it is too early for that person to pass away.
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Well, somehow, life is like an empty dream.
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Changing the topic, I think you have a good relationship with other teachers, and I am sure that you will be happy to go to work every day because of your coworkers.
>> Changing the topic, I think you have a good relationship with other teachers, and I am sure that you are happy to go to work every day because of your coworkers. (C2 When you use EVERY DAY, be sure to make the tense of your verb in present form.)
>> OR: Let\'s change the topic. I think you have a good ...
By the way, I will tell you about the story of \'Mad Max.\'
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The time of that movie is the 22nd century, because of a nuclear war, our earth was destroyed.
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One villain monopolized oil and water that are not enough for people to use, and he is dominating the human beings remaining by those natural resources.
>> C3 I THINK WHAT YOU WANT TO SAY IS: One villain monopolized oil and water that are not enough for people to use, and he is dominating the remaining human beings by those natural resources.
One female lead is one of the villain\'s slaves, and she work out some scheme with a male lead to cope with the villain and escape from hell.
>> The female lead is one of the villain\'s slaves, and she worked out some schemes with the male lead to cope with the villain and escape from hell. (C4 Use THE before FEMALE and MALE LEADS.)
The two leads finally escaped from the hell with some women who can deliver a baby, of course, those women had been subordinate to the villain, and they had been only used to deliver a baby for the villain before they got away from the villain.
>> C5 I THINK IT IS BETTER TO SAY: The two leads finally escaped from hell with some women who can deliver babies. Of course, those women had been subordinate to the villain, and they had been used only to bear babies for the bad guy before they got away from him.
However, the earth is destroyed already, so no matter where they go, they couldn\'t find a land of hope.
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In this case, they decided to defeat the villain and conquer the fortress where the villain is dominating now.
>> In this case, they decided to defeat the villain and conquer the fortress where he is dominating now. (C6 Avoid redundancy.)
As their plan, they finally defeated the villain and could have share the only living space in earth with almost all people.
>> As their plan, they finally defeated him and could share the living space in the earth with almost all people. (C7 Let\'s not use the word VILLAIN a lot. There should be THE before EARTH. PATTERN: could share or could have shared)
What I wrote above is just a simple story.
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>> OR: What I wrote above is just a summary of the movie.
If you have a chance to watch that, I\'d like to recommend it to you.
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My rate of this movie is 8.5 points out of 10. ^^
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Anyway, thanks for sharing your last weekend\'s story, and happy reading! ^^
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P.S.: Below are my answers for my homework.
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I feel a little hard to answer those. ^^;;
>> I felt a little hard to answer those. (C8 FEEL should be FELT.)
>> OR: I had a little hard time answering them.
1. You shouldn\'t worry about the exam because you have prepared well and you\'ll probably find it A PIECE OF CAKE.
(d) very easy
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2. The trouble with you is that you are a bit selfish and your sole philosophy is to HAVE YOUR CAKE AND EAT IT.
(a) expect too much of life
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3. When he heard that the necklace had been stolen, HE DROPPED IT LIKE A HOT POTATO.
(a) he let it fall from his hands
>> (b) he suddenly lost interest in it
4. He sits and watches TV all day and has turned into A VERITABLE COUCH POTATO.
(c) a very lazy person
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5. Thanks to you we\'re really IN THE SOUP now and I don\'t honestly know why I ever listen to you.
(b) in deep trouble
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6. As he had been away from home for some years, they decided on his return to COOK THE FATTED CALF.
(a) have a big celebration
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7. There\'s something VERY FISHY about that story he told us because I can\'t quite get to the bottom of it.
(c) suspicious
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8. Their mother always describes her twin sons as LIKE TWO PEAS IN A POD.
(d) both looking exactly alike
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9. After what he said and after what has happened he certainly seems to HAVE GOT EGG ON HIS FACE.
(a) have made a fool of himself
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10. He always took advice from his parents about being careful and never PUT ALL HIS EGGS IN ONE BASKET.
(b) relied too much on one plan
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