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2015-06-19 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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Dear my Teacher Paula, Good morning! These days, I am in trouble with my skin. The weather here is getting hotter, and my skin is also getting oilier. Somehow, my face seems like an oil field. Hahaha! I don't usually eat greasy foods too much, but I don't know why my skin has changed to oily skin. To remove the oil from my face, I usually wash it with green tea powers. From what I know, if a moisture balance on face is broken, we might have an oily skin. In this case, I think soothing mask pack will be helpful for our tired skins. How do you care your skin? Do you have a special remedy? As both of us know, for ladies, the skin is the most important factor to look more beautiful and younger. In this hot weather, it is easy for our skins to get burned by the sun, so it can make our skin to be more sensitive. Female skin is much thinner than male, so our women need to concentrate more on caring our skins. However, the saddest fact is that a skin of good condition was inborn. It somehow makes me discouraged, but I can't be lazy to care my skin. If you have some good methods about skin cares, please share those with me. ^^ See you soon! P.S.: Here is my homework, but I felt that these are harder than yesterday's questions. ^^;; 1. Nobody knows what's GOING ON? (c) happening 2. Don't worry we'll SEE YOU'RE ALL RIGHT. (d) look after you 3. What you need is something that will PICK YOU UP. -> I really don't know about this meaning. ㅠㅠ (a) make you feel better (b) make you stand better (c) make you hold on better (d) make you stay on better 4. I simply CAN'T STAND sugar in my tea or coffee. (a) can't eat 5. I have a feeling that she's TAKING YOU FOR A RIDE. (c) trying to trick you 6. He's always GOT HIS NOSE IN A BOOK. (b) reading 7. I think you're ASKING TOO MUCH of them as they are just children. (d) expecting too much 8. If you want my opinion, I think this needs LOOKING INTO. (a) examining 9. ONE FINE DAY I expect everything will be clear to you. (c) In the end 10. I think the time has come when you should PUT YOUR TOE IN THE WATER at least. (b) give it a try

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Dear my Student [이름], Happy Thursday! ^.^ Sorry for keeping you waiting for my reply. T.T By the way, we have the same situation in connection to our skin. I also have oilier face nowadays, but I consider this as a normal happening. Hahaha! ^^ I don\'t do anything to care for my skin. I just make sure that it is always clean. I hope I can so something to make my skin to have a better condition. Anyway, you committed three mistakes in doing your homework. I think I have to agree with you that this activity is more difficult than the homework that you did last Tuesday. However, you still did great. Thank you for being honest about this work I made you to do! ^^ That\'s all for now! ^^ Happy reading! ^^, See you in our class later! ^^. ... Teacher Paula ... ^.~ Dear my Teacher Paula, >> CORRECT! Good morning! >> CORRECT! These days, I am in trouble with my skin. >> CORRECT! >> BETTER: These days, I have skin trouble. The weather here is getting hotter, and my skin is also getting oilier. >> CORRECT! Somehow, my face seems like an oil field. Hahaha! >> CORRECT! I don\'t usually eat greasy foods too much, but I don\'t know why my skin has changed to oily skin. >> I don\'t usually eat greasy foods too much, but I don\'t know why my skin has changed to an oily one. (C1: Avoid redundancy.) To remove the oil from my face, I usually wash it with green tea powers.>> CORRECT! (However, I don\'t know GREEN TEA POWERS.) From what I know, if a moisture balance on face is broken, we might have an oily skin. >> CORRECT! In this case, I think soothing mask pack will be helpful for our tired skins. >> CORRECT! How do you care your skin? >> How do you care for your skin? (C2: PATTERN: care for something or someone) >> OR: How do you take care of your skin? Do you have a special remedy? >> CORRECT! As both of us know, for ladies, the skin is the most important factor to look more beautiful and younger. >> CORRECT! In this hot weather, it is easy for our skins to get burned by the sun, so it can make our skin to be more sensitive. >> CORRECT! Female skin is much thinner than male, so our women need to concentrate more on caring our skins. >> Female\'s skin is much thinner than male\'s, so our women need to concentrate more on caring for our skins. (C3: See C2.) However, the saddest fact is that a skin of good condition was inborn. >> However, the saddest fact is that a skin of good condition is inborn. (C4: Your idea is a fact, so your sentence should be in PRESENT FORM.) It somehow makes me discouraged, but I can\'t be lazy to care my skin. >> It somehow makes me discouraged, but I cant be lazy to care for my skin. (C5: See C2.) >> OR: It somehow makes me discouraged, but I cant be lazy to take care of my skin. If you have some good methods about skin cares, please share those with me. ^^ >> CORRECT! See you soon! >> CORRECT! P.S.: Here is my homework, but I felt that these are harder than yesterday\'s questions. ^^;;>> CORRECT! 1. Nobody knows what\'s GOING ON?(c) happening>> CORRECT! 2. Don\'t worry we\'ll SEE YOU\'RE ALL RIGHT.(d) look after you >> CORRECT!3. What you need is something that will PICK YOU UP. -> I really don\'t know about this meaning. ㅠㅠ(a) make you feel better(b) make you stand better(c) make you hold on better(d) make you stay on better>> (a) make you feel better.4. I simply CAN\'T STAND sugar in my tea or coffee.(a) can\'t eat>> (c) can\'t tolerate5. I have a feeling that she\'s TAKING YOU FOR A RIDE.(c) trying to trick you>> CORRECT!6. He\'s always GOT HIS NOSE IN A BOOK.(b) reading>> CORRECT!7. I think you\'re ASKING TOO MUCH of them as they are just children.(d) expecting too much>> CORRECT!8. If you want my opinion, I think this needs LOOKING INTO.(a) examining>> CORRECT!9. ONE FINE DAY I expect everything will be clear to you.(c) In the end>> CORRECT!10. I think the time has come when you should PUT YOUR TOE IN THE WATER at least.(b) give it a try >> (d) give it a chance

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