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2015-06-19 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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Dear my Teacher Paula, A terrific Friday to both of us! What is the M&M's chocolate? Is that a brand name? It is my first time to hear that. ^^;; By the way, sorry for skipping my yesterday's homework. I think those are difficult for me to answer, so sometimes, I need a lot of time to do that. Yesterday, I was supposed to do that, but I suddenly encountered some urgent problems on my tasks, so I couldn't finish my homework. However, I will try to do my best and finish those as far as possible in the future By the way, are you going to the gym on this coming weekend? I want to listen to your first impression of that place. ^^ In my case, I don't have a special plan. These days, I am a little lazy to go out due to the hot weather. As I heard from daily news, it will rain tomorrow all day, so I don't think I want to play outside. However, this rain will help solving a drought, and that is really a good news for our farmers. The long drought exposed the cracked floor of the reservoir, and rice paddies cracked all over. We have the most serious drought in 45 years. Well, it is time for us to consider relations between human beings and nature seriously. I can definitely feel the importance and the preciousness of our nature by this situation. Anyway, thanks for reading my long composition, and see you very soon. ^^ P.S.: Below are my answers for my homework. 1. If I were you, I'd tell her to GO JUMP IN THE RIVER. (c) go away 2. I can't understand why he doesn't TAKE THE HINT. (a) understand the point 3. I should be grateful if you would let me KEEP MYSELF TO MYSELF. (b) be private 4. I wish they would stop POKING THEIR NOSES INTO our affairs. (c) interfering in 5. I get the impression that they think we've OUTSTAYED OUR WELCOME here. (d) stayed too long 6. We asked him if he wanted to join us on the outing but he refused — I think HE'S A BIT OF A LONE WOLF. (a) he prefers to be alone 7. She LOOKED STRAIGHT THROUGH HIM as soon as he entered the room. (c) took no notice of him 8. Since the news broke about the disaster, he's been KEEPING A VERY LOW PROFILE. (d) trying not to be seen 9. After the political scandal in the government no-one in the cabinet is prepared to PUT THEIR HEAD ABOVE THE PARAPET. (c) speak in public 10. If you really want to come out of this without too much damage, my advice is to PLAY DUMB. (b) say nothing

강사 첨삭

Dear my Student [이름],   A marvelous Friday to a beautiful woman like you! ^.^   You are right! ^^ M&M\'s Chocolate is a brand name. M&M\'s are colorful button-shaped chocolates with letter \'m\' printed on one side. It\'s original filling is milk chocolate which is branded \'plain.\' There is another variety, and it is \'Peanut\' M&M\'s. Each chocolate had a peanut inside, and it is coated in milk chocolate. There are still other varieties such as \'peanut butter,\' \'pretzel,\' \'crispy\' and \'dark chocolate.\' I hope I already explained what M&M\'s chocolate is.   By the way, I will go to the gym tomorrow. I will surely tell you about it on Monday. Hahaha! ^^ Suddenly, I am excited to go to the gym and have my work out. I really want to sweat a lot and be fit. Go for a healthier body! ^^ Go for a sexy body! ^^, Hahaha! ^^.   Anyway, you get a perfect score on your homework. That\'s totally awesome! ^^ Congratulations! ^^.   That\'s all for now! ^^ Happy reading! ^^, See you next week! ^^.   ... Teacher Paula ... ^.~     Dear my Teacher Paula, >> CORRECT! A terrific Friday to both of us! >> CORRECT! What is the M&M\'s chocolate? >> What is M&M\'s Chocolate? (C1 M&M Chocolate is a PROPER NOUN, so don\'t use any article in front of this phrase.) Is that a brand name? >> CORRECT! It is my first time to hear that. ^^;;>> CORRECT! By the way, sorry for skipping my yesterday\'s homework. >> CORRECT! I think those are difficult for me to answer, so sometimes, I need a lot of time to do that. >> CORRECT! Yesterday, I was supposed to do that, but I suddenly encountered some urgent problems on my tasks, so I couldn\'t finish my homework. >> CORRECT! However, I will try to do my best and finish those as far as possible in the future >> CORRECT! By the way, are you going to the gym on this coming weekend? >> CORRECT! >> OR: By the way, are you going to the gym this coming weekend? I want to listen to your first impression of that place. ^^>> CORRECT! In my case, I don\'t have a special plan. >> CORRECT! These days, I am a little lazy to go out due to the hot weather.>> CORRECT! As I heard from daily news, it will rain tomorrow all day, so I don\'t think I want to play outside. >> As I heard from the daily news, it will rain tomorrow all day, so I don\'t think I want to play outside. (DAILY NEWS has a specific idea, so it is better to put THE before it.) However, this rain will help solving a drought, and that is really a good news for our farmers. >> CORRECT! The long drought exposed the cracked floor of the reservoir, and rice paddies cracked all over. >> CORRECT! We have the most serious drought in 45 years. >> CORRECT! Well, it is time for us to consider relations between human beings and nature seriously. >> CORRECT! >> OR: Well, it is time for us to consider the relationship between human beings and nature. >> OR: Well, it is time for us to consider our relationship with nature. I can definitely feel the importance and the preciousness of our nature by this situation. >> CORRECT! >> BETTER: I can definitely feel the importance and preciousness of our nature in this situation. Anyway, thanks for reading my long composition, and see you very soon. ^^>> CORRECT! P.S.: Below are my answers for my homework. >> CORRECT! (You may also put your name before you write your postscript.) 1. If I were you, I\'d tell her to GO JUMP IN THE RIVER.(c) go away>> CORRECT! 2. I can\'t understand why he doesn\'t TAKE THE HINT.(a) understand the point>> CORRECT! 3. I should be grateful if you would let me KEEP MYSELF TO MYSELF.(b) be private>> CORRECT! 4. I wish they would stop POKING THEIR NOSES INTO our affairs.(c) interfering in>> CORRECT! 5. I get the impression that they think we\'ve OUTSTAYED OUR WELCOME here.(d) stayed too long>> CORRECT! 6. We asked him if he wanted to join us on the outing but he refused — I think HE\'S A BIT OF A LONE WOLF.(a) he prefers to be alone>> CORRECT! 7. She LOOKED STRAIGHT THROUGH HIM as soon as he entered the room.(c) took no notice of him>> CORRECT! 8. Since the news broke about the disaster, he\'s been KEEPING A VERY LOW PROFILE.(d) trying not to be seen>> CORRECT! 9. After the political scandal in the government no-one in the cabinet is prepared to PUT THEIR HEAD ABOVE THE PARAPET.(c) speak in public>> CORRECT! 10. If you really want to come out of this without too much damage, my advice is to PLAY DUMB.(b) say nothing >> CORRECT!

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