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2015-06-22 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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Dear my Teacher Paula, A good day to you! Today, our Chinese coworkers are off due to their public holiday, so I am having some free time at my office. By the way, did you work out hard at the gym? ^^;; I think you may feel a little tired because of yesterday's exercise. In my case, I went to Myeongdong to change U.S. dollars into Korean won. Myeongdong is the most famous tourist attraction, so there are a lot of currency exchange offices. In addition, I can find the best rate of exchange, so I usually don't go to the bank to change that. After doing that, I met a friend who is a mother of twins to buy some presents for another female friend who recently delivered a boy baby. Because of the spread of MERS, we haven't visited her to celebrate her delivery, so we just bought some layettes, and I am going to send those to her by a courier today. We bought a thermometer, a few wet tissues and a pack of diaper. It was a little shame that we couldn't visit her in person due to our current situation. I think we can see her and her baby when the MERS ceases to exist. Anyway, that is all for my yesterday's story and happy reading! See you very soon. [이름] P.S.: Here is my homework. 1. The audience HELD THEIR BREATH as the magician started to saw a woman half. (b) stopped breathing 2. The police officer called out to the driver to HOLD ON until he arrived. (c) wait 3. In the end she lost her temper and told her daughter to HOLD HER TONGUE. (d) be quiet 4. There's no need to change any of the regulations this year as the old ones will still HOLD GOOD this year, too. (b) be all right 5. I don't know what it is exactly but she seems to have some kind of HOLD OVER him. (a) control over 6. He HOLDS IT AGAINST her that she never let him move house and start a new job. (d) blames 7. I think your best plan is to HOLD OFF making a decision until you know if you have passed the examination. (a) delay 8. It was a very difficult race but the jockey HELD HIS OWN right until the end. (b) did as well as the others 9. Once he starts to talk about his favorite subject, he will HOLD FORTH until he is stopped. (c) speak endlessly 10. The trouble is that whenever he's with strangers he always HOLDS IN his feelings. (b) restricts

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Hi there, Dear [이름]! ^.^ Happy Monday! ^^   I became very curious about your Chinese coworkers\' holiday, so I surf on the web and tried to find it. Fortunately, I was successful, and their national holiday for this day of the year is called Dragon Boat Festival Holiday. This is celebrated from June 20 to 22 this year. Furthermore, the festival occurs on the fifth day of the fifth month on the Chinese lunar calendar.   By the way, about your question if I worked hard at the gym, of course, I did. However, just like what I told you during our class today, I didn\'t really enjoy my stay there, because I was not satisfied with their services, especially with their facilities. But, I enjoyed my Saturday, because my friend and I watched a horror movie entitled \'Insidious\'. It was really a great film. Most people who were at the cinema with us that time shouted and screamed. My friend and I screamed at the end. It was because of the shocking image that we saw. Hahaha! ^^ I want to watch that again, but I want to watch it alone. ^^   Anyhow, I hope MERS to be completely treated soon. I am happy for your friend, but I am just a little curious about when and where she delivered her baby.   Anyway, good job for getting 9 out of 10. You proved me that you are doing your homework intelligently. Very good! ^^   That\'s all for now! ^^, Happy reading and checking! ^^. See you tomorrow! ^.^   ... Teacher Paula ... ^.~   P.S.: Last Sunday, most Filipinos celebrated Father\'s Day. ^^     Dear my Teacher Paula, >> CORRECT! A good day to you! >> CORRECT! Today, our Chinese coworkers are off due to their public holiday, so I am having some free time at my office. >> CORRECT! >> OR: Today, our Chinese coworkers are off due to their national holiday, so I am having some free time at my office. By the way, did you work out hard at the gym? ^^;;>> CORRECT! I think you may feel a little tired because of yesterday\'s exercise. >> CORRECT! In my case, I went to Myeongdong to change U.S. dollars into Korean won. >> CORRECT! Myeongdong is the most famous tourist attraction, so there are a lot of currency exchange offices.>> CORRECT! >> OR: Myeongdong is the most famous tourist destination in our country, so there are a lot of currency exchange offices. In addition, I can find the best rate of exchange, so I usually don\'t go to the bank to change that. >> CORRECT! After doing that, I met a friend who is a mother of twins to buy some presents for another female friend who recently delivered a boy baby. >> After doing that, I met a friend who is a mother of twins to buy some presents for another female friend who recently delivered a baby boy. (C1 PATTERN: baby boy and baby girl) Because of the spread of MERS, we haven\'t visited her to celebrate her delivery, so we just bought some layettes, and I am going to send those to her by a courier today. >> CORRECT! >> OR: Because of the spread of MERS, we haven\'t visited her to rejoice for her successful delivery of her baby. Therefore, we just bought some layettes, and I am going to send those to her by a courier today. We bought a thermometer, a few wet tissues and a pack of diaper.>> We bought a thermometer, a few wet tissues and a pack of diapers. (C2 DIAPER is countable. Since you gave a quantity for it, it should be in it\'s plural form.) It was a little shame that we couldn\'t visit her in person due to our current situation. >> CORRECT! >> OR: We were a little ashamed that we couldn\'t visit her due to our current situation. >> OR: We were a little ashamed that we couldn\'t see her in person due to our current situation. I think we can see her and her baby when the MERS ceases to exist. >> CORRECT! Anyway, that is all for my yesterday\'s story and happy reading! >> CORRECT! See you very soon. >> CORRECT! >> OR: See you very soon! [이름]>> CORRECT! P.S.: Here is my homework. >> CORRECT!1. The audience HELD THEIR BREATH as the magician started to saw a woman half.(b) stopped breathing>> (a) watched anxiously2. The police officer called out to the driver to HOLD ON until he arrived.(c) wait>> CORRECT!3. In the end she lost her temper and told her daughter to HOLD HER TONGUE.(d) be quiet >> CORRECT!4. There\'s no need to change any of the regulations this year as the old ones will still HOLD GOOD this year, too.(b) be all right>> CORRECT!5. I don\'t know what it is exactly but she seems to have some kind of HOLD OVER him.(a) control over>> CORRECT!6. He HOLDS IT AGAINST her that she never let him move house and start a new job.(d) blames>> CORRECT!7. I think your best plan is to HOLD OFF making a decision until you know if you have passed the examination.(a) delay>> CORRECT!8. It was a very difficult race but the jockey HELD HIS OWN right until the end.(b) did as well as the others>> CORRECT!9. Once he starts to talk about his favorite subject, he will HOLD FORTH until he is stopped.(c) speak endlessly>> CORRECT!10. The trouble is that whenever he\'s with strangers he always HOLDS IN his feelings.(b) restricts >> CORRECT!

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