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2015-07-06 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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Dear my Teacher Paula, A fabulous Friday to you! First, I would like to say thank you for explaining your whereabouts on your reply. My curiosity disappeared totally. ^^ Due to your next call, you must have been busy and must have prepared for something in a hurry. As a teacher, that was a normal situation, and I could completely understand that. I think conducting a level test is one of your important duties. ^^ I hope that the person will make a decision of taking a class with you. By the way, today, I met my boss after a long time, and just like what I imagined, we had a long meeting. Even if I felt a little bored, but that was an avoidable situation. ^^;; He might have felt stuffy while he was in China, because he could not find any people who can talk with him. I somehow pity him and think that I should listen to his words well in the future. ^^ By the way, I will tell you something that I saw in the morning. I saw one guy ran up to get on the subway that I was riding on. The subway's doors were just about to close, but he forcefully tried to open the door with his hands. However, he eventually failed to get on that despite his efforts, but his paper bag was caught in the door, and the train left with the bag on schedule. It was really a shame for him to be unable to get on that train, but that was a very dangerous behavior. Not only he lost his possession, but also that kind of behavior can make the train delayed. As one of office workers, I could understand his busyness, but it will make more troubles in the end. Our today's lesson that we can learn from this situation is that don't rush. Hahaha! ^^ Anyway, that's all for now and see you very soon! [이름]

강사 첨삭

Dear my Diligent Student [이름],   A blooming Friday for us! ^.^ Hahaha! ^^   I am sorry to hear that your boss didn\'t resolve the issue in relation with LG Electronics. I think he needs to unwind a lot to avoid being stressed from that problem.   By the way, I can\'t imagine that a person will risk his life just to get on the subway. It might really have cost his life. I will never do what he just did. I love my life very much, so I will keep your advice in mind. Hahaha! ^^   Anyway, happy reading! ^^ Enjoy your time always! ^^, See you on Monday! ^^.   ... Teacher Paula ... ^.~     Dear my Teacher Paula, >> CORRECT! A fabulous Friday to you! >> CORRECT! First, I would like to say thank you for explaining your whereabouts on your reply. >> CORRECT! My curiosity disappeared totally. ^^>> CORRECT! Due to your next call, you must have been busy and must have prepared for something in a hurry. >> CORRECT! >> BETTER: Due to your next call at that time, you must have been busy and have prepared for something in a hurry. As a teacher, that was a normal situation, and I could completely understand that. >> CORRECT! I think conducting a level test is one of your important duties. ^^>> CORRECT! I hope that the person will make a decision of taking a class with you. >> CORRECT! By the way, today, I met my boss after a long time, and just like what I imagined, we had a long meeting. >> CORRECT! >> OR: By the way, I met my boss today after a long time, and just like what I expected, we had a long meeting. Even if I felt a little bored, but that was an avoidable situation. ^^;; >> CORRECT! He might have felt stuffy while he was in China, because he could not find any people who can talk with him. >> CORRECT! I somehow pity him and think that I should listen to his words well in the future. ^^>> CORRECT! By the way, I will tell you something that I saw in the morning. >> CORRECT! I saw one guy ran up to get on the subway that I was riding on. >> CORRECT! The subway\'s doors were just about to close, but he forcefully tried to open the door with his hands. >> CORRECT! However, he eventually failed to get on that despite his efforts, but his paper bag was caught in the door, and the train left with the bag on schedule.>> However, he eventually failed to get on that despite of his efforts, but his paper bag was caught in the door, and the train left with the bag on schedule. (C1 PATTERN: despite of) >> OR: However, he eventually failed to get on despite of his efforts, but his paper bag was caught in the door, and the train left with the bag on schedule. It was really a shame for him to be unable to get on that train, but that was a very dangerous behavior.>> CORRECT! Not only he lost his possession, but also that kind of behavior can make the train delayed. >> Not only he lost his possession, but also that kind of behavior can make the train be on delayed schedule. As one of office workers, I could understand his busyness, but it will make more troubles in the end. >> CORRECT! Our today\'s lesson that we can learn from this situation is that don\'t rush. Hahaha! ^^>> CORRECT! Anyway, that\'s all for now and see you very soon! >> CORRECT! [이름] >> CORRECT!

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