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2015-07-21 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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Dear my Teacher Paula, A happy Tuesday to you! First, Congratulations on your full time job in Power English! I hope you can get a raise in your salary. ^^;; However, I somehow feel regretful about your decision, because I know about your dream. Well, I believe that you always choose the best way in your situation. ^^ By the way, I saw your reply with fun, and I though you are so strong. You stayed up all night, but you didn't seem to feel tired. If I were in that situation, I would faint the next day and sleep all day. Take advantage of your youth and play to the fullest, but always protect yourself and play safely. ^^~ By the way, regarding your student, is he the one who I know? If it is right, he might have been Taiwanese. No matter how persistent he was on asking you to teach him, I am happy for hearing the good result finally. You did manage your time and the guy well. ^^ Don't overdo yourself on teaching English too much for your health. ^^ Anyway, I reviewed my recording of our last class, and there is a question about the meaning of a word, and that is 'celebrant.' Does it refer to the baby girl who celebrated her 1st birthday? According to a sentence below, my guess might be correct. -> I also gave US$100 as a monetary gift for the birthday celebrant. However, the meaning of the word in my dictionary is that 'A celebrant is a person who takes part in a ceremony and sends congratulations to someone.' I am a little confused about the meaning of that. Is it 'A person who sends congratulations' or 'A person who receives congratulations'? I am waiting for your kind explanation. ^^ Thank you in advance for your help. ^^ See you very soon! [이름]

강사 첨삭

Dear my Student [이름],

 

A happy Tuesday also to you! ^.^

Thank you for the greeting! ^^

You made my gloomy day bright! ^^,

 

By the way, thank you for the congratulations! ^^ Hahaha! ^^,

Of course, I will have a higher salary. ^^.

My work is from six hours to nine hours.

I am so blessed and excited to be a good full time teacher and employee.

I will make sure that my superiors won\'t regret approving my favor.

I am really very happy.

God answered my prayers! ^^

 

Anyway, don\'t worry about my dream! ^^,

There\'s always time for me to have Masters.

For now, I will help first and study later. Hahaha! ^^.

 

Anyhow, I think you can also stay awake for many days just like me.

We are so young, so let\'s take advantage of it! Hahaha! ^^

Young human body can do anything, and it will stay healthy.

 

Well, you are right about my private student.

He is the same person I told you before.

He is Taiwanese.

He is good at sales talk, but I am better than him.

He can\'t win over me. Hahaha! ^^.

 

Oh~~~!!! ^^

I need to answer a very important question.

What is the meaning of celebrant?

A celebrant is a person who leads a church service or a person who is celebrating something, for example at a party.

Therefore, your understanding about this word in connection to our class is correct, and I am sorry to say that your dictionary gave you somehow a wrong meaning of it.

 

Thank you for the question! ^^

Frankly speaking, I checked all the dictionaries I have, and all of them gave the same meaning of celebrant.

 

Anyway, that\'s all for now! ^^,

I hope I answered your question well! ^^.

See you very soon! ^.^

 

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

 

P.S.: Don\'t forget to have fun while checking the corrections and suggestions below. ^^

 

 

Dear my Teacher Paula,
>> CORRECT!

A happy Tuesday to you!
>> CORRECT!

First, Congratulations on your full time job in Power English!
>> First, congratulations on your full time job in Power English! (C1 The C in CONGRATULATION shouldn\'t be in capital letter.)

I hope you can get a raise in your salary. ^^;;
>> CORRECT!

However, I somehow feel regretful about your decision, because I know about your dream.
>> CORRECT!

Well, I believe that you always choose the best way in your situation. ^^
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: Well, I believe that you always choose the best for yourself.

By the way, I saw your reply with fun, and I though you are so strong.
>> By the way, I saw your reply with fun, and I thought you are so strong. (C2 THOUGH should be THOUGHT, right?)

You stayed up all night, but you didn\'t seem to feel tired.
>> CORRECT!

If I were in that situation, I would faint the next day and sleep all day.
>> CORRECT!

Take advantage of your youth and play to the fullest, but always protect yourself and play safely. ^^~
>> CORRECT!

By the way, regarding your student, is he the one who I know?
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: By the way, regarding your student, do I know him?

If it is right, he might have been Taiwanese.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: If it is right, he is Taiwanese.

No matter how persistent he was on asking you to teach him, I am happy for hearing the good result finally.
>> CORRECT!

You did manage your time and the guy well. ^^
>> CORRECT!

Don\'t overdo yourself on teaching English too much for your health. ^^
>> Don\'t overdo teaching English for your health. (C3 Putting OVERDO and TOO MUCH seems redundant. What do you think?)

>> OR: Don\'t teach English too much for you to have a good health.

Anyway, I reviewed my recording of our last class, and there is a question about the meaning of a word, and that is \'celebrant.\'
>> CORRECT!

Does it refer to the baby girl who celebrated her 1st birthday?
>> CORRECT!

According to a sentence below, my guess might be correct.
>> CORRECT!

-> I also gave US$100 as a monetary gift for the birthday celebrant.
>> CORRECT!

However, the meaning of the word in my dictionary is that \'A celebrant is a person who takes part in a ceremony and sends congratulations to someone.\'
>> However, the meaning of the word in my dictionary is that, \'A celebrant is a person who takes part in a ceremony and sends congratulations to someone.\' (C4 You forgot to put a COMMA after THAT.)

>> OR: However, the meaning of the word in my dictionary is that \'a celebrant is a person who takes part in a ceremony and sends congratulations to someone.\'

I am a little confused about the meaning of that.
>> CORRECT!

Is it \'A person who sends congratulations\' or \'A person who receives congratulations\'?
>> Is it \'a person who sends congratulations\' or \'a person who receives congratulations\'? (C5 It is better to write \'a person\' than \'A person.\')

I am waiting for your kind explanation. ^^
>> CORRECT!

Thank you in advance for your help. ^^
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: Thank you in advance for your help!

See you very soon!
>> CORRECT!

[이름]

>> CORRECT!

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