Composition

Dear my Student [이름],

A tremendously happy Tuesday to both of us! ^.^

Thank you for not skipping your extra task in connection to writing! ^^

You really help me improve my capability to understand things, especially you.

I am also thankful for the support you are willing to give.

I can feel that you are always there to back me up. Hahaha! ^^,

We are somehow like partners in crime. Hahaha! ^^.

By the way, thank you for the greeting for my father\'s birthday. ^^

I will tell him about it, and I know he will be glad because of you greeting him.

Anyhow, about the condition of our connection during our last class, I asked our IT about it, and said that there was nothing wrong with our connection that time, but he will look into it more so that we won\'t be having more problems in relation to that.

Don\'t worry! ^^

I will also check it more. ^^,

Anyway, let\'s talk about your composition.

Frankly speaking, I also think that when we grow older, we take more risks, because we want to have better lives.

Sometimes, we chase after them.

Instead of them just show up in front of us, we look for them.

We sometimes look for challenges, and taking a risk is the best method to satisfy ourselves.

What do you think? ^^

That\'s all for now! ^^,

I hope you enjoy reading my letter for you. ^^.

See you very soon! ^.^

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

Dear my Teacher Paula,
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A happy Tuesday to you! ^^
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I already read your reply with happiness and fun, and I am really happy for your decision.
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You said in our last class that you broke up promise to yourself and experienced a sense of shame.
>> You said in our last class that you broke a promise to yourself and experienced a sense of shame. (C1 BREAK UP means to end a relationship woth someone.)

Do you know that? Promise exists to be broken. Hahaha!
>> C2 I THINK WHAT YOU MEAN IS: Do you know that promises are meant to be broken? Hahaha!

You are under a perfectly normal situation, and I support your decision. ^^
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By the way, congratulations on your father\'s birthday!
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He would be the happiest person at that time.
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My mother\'s birthday is also coming soon, so I need to think of what I should prepare for her. ^^
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By the way, I\'d like to say about our SKYPE connection.
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Actually, I didn\'t hear you clearly yesterday, and I could not review my recording perfectly this morning.
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I think there was no connection problem, but the sound of yours was a little bit small and unclear.
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It seemed like you are in a large booth, and your sound echoes in the empty room.
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It was similar with the situation when you didn\'t take your microphone down.
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However, I could not find any problems about your microphone\'s position, so I am so curious about this situation.
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Please help me to check it before our class, and I will also do it in my side.
>> Please help me to check it before our class, and I will also do it on my side. (C3 PATTERN: on the side)

That\'s all for today!
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See you very soon! ^^
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[이름]
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P.S.: I hand in my today\'s homework to you below.
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*ESSAY: Do you think people take fewer risks as they grow older?
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>> OR: Taking Risks Versus Growing Older

In my opinion, when we grow older, we can\'t avoid taking more risks.
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Our lives are made of challenging things, and those make us become mature.
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There is a saying that human beings lives go together with sufferings, and only in that situation, we can look for and feel our happiness.
>> There is a saying that human beings\' lives go together with sufferings, and only in that situation, we can look for and feel our happiness. (C4 There should be an apostrophe after BEINGS.)

Happiness is the opposite of suffering, and it means that if we don\'t know about the suffering, we can\'t feel what happiness is.
>> Happiness is the opposite of suffering, and it means that if we don\'t know about suffering, we can\'t feel what happiness is. (C5 THE SUFFERING should only be SUFFERING.)

If we can\'t avoid experiencing challenging and difficult things, all we need to do is to take those confidently and carefully.
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If we always try to run away from those, our lives will only have empty shells.
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In conclusion, we can say that life is a long journey to seek invisible happiness.

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