Composition

Dear my Student [이름],

A terrific Thursday to us! ^.^

I feel so tired today, because I didn\'t have enough sleep, but I still feel great. Hahaha! ^^

I feel like I am in cloud 9. Hahaha! ^^,

Anyway, I am glad that you are comfortable to take the subway these days.

It is really good that other Koreans are having their summer vacations, but don\'t you envy them?

Well, I know you will also have your vacation soon. ^^.

That\'s all for now! ^^

I am so sorry for making a very short reply, but I hope you still find joy while reading it.

See you very soon! ^^,

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

Dear my Teacher Paula,
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A good day to you!
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These days, I feel comfortable when I get on the subway, because many people are having their summer vacations, so there are less people than usual. 
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>> BETTER: These days, I feel comfortable when I get on the subway, because many people are having their summer vacations, so there are fewer people taking public transportation than usual.

I don\'t need to be pushed in a crowded subway for a while.
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I have also considered moving into another place where it is near my office to avoid a jam-packed subway.
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However, our office is in Gangnam which is the most expensive place in Seoul, so I can\'t afford to rent a house near my office.
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I would have to look for a house that is comparatively cheap and only 30~40 minutes away from my office.
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>> OR: I would have to look for a house that is comparatively cheap and only 30 to 40 minutes away from my office.

I think it will be hard for me to find a house with a good condition, because many landlords tend to rent their houses by the monthly rent due to a low interest income.
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In that case, I would have to consider getting my retirement pay prematurely.
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>> OR: In that case, I would have to consider getting my retirement pay in advance.

Living in Seoul is so hard for me. Hahaha! ^^;;
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That\'s all for today and see you very soon!
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[이름]
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P.S.: Here is my today\'s homework.
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>> OR: Below is my homework.

>> OR: Here is my homework.

*Essay: Youth Is Adventure.
>> Youth is Adventure (C1 It is better to remove *ESSAY and DOT.)

Our lives are such adventures.
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I believe that I am also at the beginning of a great adventure.
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Every day, I am fighting with arrogant and stubborn customers, and I am trying to train myself to become a stronger person mentally in terrible circumstances.
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>> OR: Every day, I am fighting with arrogant and stubborn customers, and I am trying to train myself to become a stronger person mentally in order to face terrible circumstances.

Sometimes, I really want to give up this position, but I am still thinking that I am not yet ready for going into the wider world.
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>> OR: Sometimes, I really want to give this position up, but I am still thinking that I am not yet ready to go to the wider world.

>> OR: Sometimes, I really want to give this position up, but I am still thinking that I am not yet ready to go out from my comfort zone.

No doubt there are more extreme competitions in the outside world.
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However, I am still young, and I shouldn\'t run away from facing new adventurous things.
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I am still conscious of my failure, but it is thinking like \'A big fish in a little pond.\'
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I like this famous saying \'Bounce back up like a Roly-poly toy.\'
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This sentence will give me courage in my ling life\'s journey.

>> C2 I THINK WHAT YOU WANT TO SAY IS: This sentence will give me courage in my little life\'s journey.