Composition

2015-08-11 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

학생이 쓴 원문

Dear my Teacher Paula, A happy Tuesday to you! First of all, I will answer you about your question. Our company allowed us to take a holiday on our moved National Liberation Day. I didn't remind our boss, but he brought up the subject first. Taking advantage of this holiday, I also asked for a leave of absence from my work next Monday, so I can take 4 days off in a row. The reason why our boss is so kind these days is because his hair begins to grow again. Not that long ago, he was suffering from a symptom of hair loss, but after taking prostate pills for months, his symptom has been getting better. Indeed, he looks like he sleeps with a hanger in his mouth every day. Well, I am also happy for him. ^^ By the way, I was supposed to take my summer vacation next week, but I have postponed my schedule until October. Wherever I go, the heat is annoying me, so I decided to change my plan totally. Fortunately, at that time of year, our Chinese coworkers have their national holiday for a week, so I don't need to care for my tasks. I would have to consider where to go to enjoy my vacation thoroughly from now. That is all for now and see you very soon! P.S.: Below is my homework. Stiff Body! In my case, I am not fond of sports. I think my body doesn't follow my brain's order so well. When I was in my school days, I somehow disliked a sport curriculum, so I used to get a poor grade. However, come to think of it, I seemed to have a talent for ball games, such as basketball, volleyball, kickball and so on. I remember that I had a good grade on the basketball test at that time. Because of my height, I was proposed to be a basketball player once. However, I was not that interested in that filed, so I didn't ever think about that. Well, I somehow think that was a good decision. Hahaha! ^^

강사 첨삭

Hi there, my Stunning Student [이름]! ^.^

Happy Tuesday! ^^

 

A blessed day to us! ^^,

 

Thank you for answering my question like it was your priority in making your composition. ^^.

I am happy for you, because you will have more time for yourself.

In addition, you won\'t really have a very busy schedule because of your Chinese co-workers\' holiday thing.

I am glad that your boss is in the mood nowadays.

I am delighted to hear about that.

He is so lucky. ^^

 

By the way, I commend you for making your homework.

You did a great job! ^^,

Once again, you made a perfect composition.

Excellent~~~!!! ^^.

Frankly speaking, because of your homework, I want to challenge you for a basketball match.

That game will be between us. Hahaha! ^^

I know that you are taller than me, but that won\'t stop me from competing with you.

I will do my best to win. Hahaha! ^^,

I really hope we can play games together.

You said you are good at ball games.

Then, playing bowling is just a piece of cake for you, right? ^^.

 

Anyway, that\'s all for now! ^^

Happy reading! ^^,

See you very soon! ^^.

 

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

 

 

Dear my Teacher Paula,
>> CORRECT!

A happy Tuesday to you!
>> CORRECT!

First of all, I will answer you about your question.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: First of all, I will answer your question.

Our company allowed us to take a holiday on our moved National Liberation Day.
>> CORRECT!

I didn\'t remind our boss, but he brought up the subject first.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: I didn\'t remind our boss about it, but he brought the topic up first.

Taking advantage of this holiday, I also asked for a leave of absence from my work next Monday, so I can take 4 days off in a row.
>> CORRECT!

The reason why our boss is so kind these days is because his hair begins to grow again.
>> CORRECT!

Not that long ago, he was suffering from a symptom of hair loss, but after taking prostate pills for months, his symptom has been getting better.
>> CORRECT!

Indeed, he looks like he sleeps with a hanger in his mouth every day.
>> CORRECT!

Well, I am also happy for him. ^^
>> CORRECT!

By the way, I was supposed to take my summer vacation next week, but I have postponed my schedule until October.
>> CORRECT!

Wherever I go, the heat is annoying me, so I decided to change my plan totally.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: Wherever I go, the heat annoys me, so I decided to change my plan totally.

Fortunately, at that time of year, our Chinese coworkers have their national holiday for a week, so I don\'t need to care for my tasks.
>> CORRECT!

I would have to consider where to go to enjoy my vacation thoroughly from now.
>> CORRECT!

That is all for now and see you very soon!
>> CORRECT!

P.S.: Below is my homework.
>> CORRECT!

Stiff Body!
>> CORRECT!

In my case, I am not fond of sports.
>> CORRECT!

I think my body doesn\'t follow my brain\'s order so well.
>> CORRECT!

When I was in my school days, I somehow disliked a sport curriculum, so I used to get a poor grade.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: In my school days, I somehow disliked a sport curriculum, so I used to get a poor grade.

However, come to think of it, I seemed to have a talent for ball games, such as basketball, volleyball, kickball and so on.
>> CORRECT!

I remember that I had a good grade on the basketball test at that time.
>> CORRECT!

Because of my height, I was proposed to be a basketball player once.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: Because of my height, I was asked to play as a basketball player once for our school.

However, I was not that interested in that filed, so I didn\'t ever think about that.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: However, I was not that interested in that field, so I didn\'t even consider that.

Well, I somehow think that was a good decision. Hahaha! ^^

>> CORRECT!

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