Composition

Dear my Teacher Paula,

A positively challenging Thursday to us! ^.^

Today is a day that we should feel happy.

Why?

It is because tomorrow is Friday.

Aren\'t you excited? Hahaha! ^^

By the way, it is good that the rain shower that you experienced today didn\'t last long.

Ohhh~~~! ^^,

Suddenly, I can imagine what happened there.

I can even smell your place outside after the rain.

I can feel the freshness of everything outside your workplace.

The buildings, plants and cars are clean because of the rain shower.

Ohhh~~~! ^^.

What a wonderful feeling! ^.^

Anyway, I think I can use your mosquito net not for sleeping but for playing with my nieces so that the mosquitoes won\'t annoy us while having fun together. Hahaha! ^^

That\'s all for now! ^^

Happy reading! ^^,

See you later! ^^.

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

Dear my Teacher Paula,
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Good morning!
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I just experienced a heavy shower for a short time, but now, it has stopped raining and is a blue sky.
>> C1 IT IS BETTER TO SAY: We just experienced a heavy shower for a short time, but now, it has stopped, and I can see a blue sky.

By the way, yesterday, I finally received a new mosquito net, and I used it when I sleep.
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It is very big and wide, so the maximum 10 people can sleep together under it.
>> It is very big and wide, so maximum of 10 people can sleep together under it. (C2 There is no need to use THE before MAXIMUM, and OF should be placed after MAXIMUM.)

>> OR: It is very big and wide, so up to 10 people can sleep together under it.

Well, somehow, that seems larger than my place. Hahaha!
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I am really happy that I don\'t need to donate my blood to them any further. ^^
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That is all for now and see you very soon! ^^
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P.S.: Below is my composition.
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In my case, I used an old fashioned dictionary 15 years ago, but now, I am using an internet dictionary.
>> In my case, I used an old-fashioned dictionary 15 years ago, but now, I am using a dictionary on the internet. (C3 There should be a DASH [-] between OLD and FASHIONED. OLD FASHIONED and OLD-FASHIONED have different meanings. C4 INTERNET DICTIONARY is wrong. It should be ONLINE DICTIONARY.)

>> OR: In my case, I used an old-fashioned dictionary 15 years ago, but now, I am using an online dictionary.

The internet dictionary that I use every day is convenient and detailed, and even I can find a lot of good sentences to learn more.
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In addition, the development of the internet eliminates the cause of carrying an old fashioned dictionary.
>> In addition, the development of the internet eliminates the cause of carrying an old-fashioned dictionary. (C5 See C3.)

Wherever we go, we can easily solve our curiosity by internet dictionary through the mobile phone.
>> Wherever we go, we can easily solve our curiosity by using an online dictionary through a mobile phone. (C6 See C4. C7 THE before MOBILE should be A.)

What a convenience!
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Even all dictionaries support voice service in native pronunciation, so we can correct our bad habits in speaking foreign languages.
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>> OR: Even all of that kind of dictionary support voice service in native pronunciation, so we can correct our bad habits in speaking foreign languages.

Apart from those advantages, they also provide a function of vocabulary lists against some words that I didn\'t know before for free.
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This function is really useful to master foreign languages faster.
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In contrast to it, when it comes to old fashioned dictionary, not only it is so heavy to carry, but it is also torn easily after carrying that for a long time. 
>> In contrast to it, when it comes to an old-fashioned dictionary, not only it is so heavy to carry, but also it is torn easily after carrying or using that for a long time. (See C3. C8 PATTERN: NOT ONLY + S + V + [O], BUT ALSO + S + V + [O] or S + V + NOT ONLY + [O], BUT + S + V + ALSO + [O])

>> OR: In contrast to it, when it comes to an old-fashioned dictionary, it is not only so heavy to carry, but it is also torn easily after carrying or using that for a long time.

Furthermore, the color of the paper can fade from the sun or our hands.
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It is impossible to wash and disinfect, so it is somehow unhygienic to use.
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Because of those reasons, internet dictionary will be loved by many people now and for ever.

>> Because of those reasons, online dictionary will be loved by many people now and forever. (C9 See C4.)